(18/10/2014)

It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people, we can learn just as much from books, films, and the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?


It is argued that it is unnecessary of taking a journey to other places for the desire of getting more involved in the culture of nearby inhabitants there, thanks to the wide supplier from books, films, and the Internet. While I accept that the latter has a number of benefits, I believe that the former could be advantageous to some extent.

There is a variety reasons why learning about other cultures without actually visiting places is beneficial in some way. Firstly, we could not deny that using the available source of information, online or offline, save a great deal of time. For instance, instead of spending several days or even a week to explore some typical tourism attractions of Vietnam, people can read all the data of it via two or three pages. And it only takes us a morning. Secondly, by doing this way, they are successful in saving an amount of money. It could be easily understood that the Internet is free, airplane tickets or some relevant traveling fees are absolutely not.

Apart from the practical advantages expressed above, I believe that having a physical tour of another destination brings us a distinct feeling. One reason is that tourists could gain real and valuable experience through trips. “Learning is practicing.” It must be very hard for someone to enjoy a local specialty without tasting it, but only seeing some pictures of it. Furthermore, traveling gives them countless opportunities to make new friends. Enlarging the circle of relationships also means enlarging our new chances and challenges in life.

In conclusion, I agree with the idea of using the limitless sources of information around us to broaden our knowledge, but I also strongly encourage everyone of taking a real trip to different species of the world.

ngochoangIt is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people, we can learn just as much from books, films, and the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

The essay instructions have a grammatical error.

It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the cultures of other people; we can learn just as much from books, films, and the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that it is unnecessary of taking to take a journey to other places for the purpose desire of getting more involved in learning about the culture of the nearby inhabitants there, thanks to the wide supplier (wrong word) availability of information from books, films, and the Internet. While I accept that the latter has a number of benefits, I believe that the former could be advantageous to some extent.


1. "Latter and former" are not good here because they refer to ideas and concepts, not things. The reader has to go backwards and re-read the text to understand what you are talking about.

2. This essay is NOT an advantages/disadvantages essay. That type of essay is one of the most common types, but you need to learn how to answer the others you could encounter..

3. These essays require a compelling thesis statement. You need to answer the essay prompt clearly: Do you agree or disagree? Make a thesis statement that achieves this.

e.g

I generally do not agree. Given a choice of interacting with people in their own cities or just reading about them, I believe that greater and quicker understanding of a culture comes from face-to-face interactions.


There is a variety reasons (Ungrammatical. Variety is a noun, not an adjective. The subject is plural, not singular.) why learning about other cultures without actually visiting places is beneficial (Off-topic. This is not an advantages essay.) in some way. Firstly, First, we could not deny that (That is wordy and unnecessary.) using the available source (There is more than one of these.) of information, online or offline, save (wrong form) a great deal of time. For instance, instead of spending several days or even a week to explore some typical tourism attractions of Vietnam, people can read all about them on a few websites. all the data of it via two or three pages. And it only takes us a morning. Secondly, Second, by doing this way, they are successful in saving an amount of money. It could be easily understood that the Internet is free, (comma splice error) airplane tickets or some relevant traveling fees (wrong word.) are absolutely not.

Apart from the practical advantages expressed above, (Off-topic introduction. This is not an advantages essay.) I believe that having a physical tour of another destination brings us feelings that we get through senses other than our eyes. a distinct feeling. One reason is that tourists could gain real and valuable experience through trips. “Learning is practicing.” It must be very hard for someone to enjoy a local specialty without tasting it, but only seeing some pictures of it. Furthermore, traveling gives them countless opportunities to make new friends. Enlarging the circle of relationships also means enlarging our new chances and challenges in life.

In conclusion, I agree with the idea of using the limitless sources of information around us to broaden our knowledge, but I also strongly encourage everyone to travel of taking a real trip to different species (wrong word) of the world.

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