Question:

Some people believe that the arts should receive money from government and big companies. Others feel such spending is a luxury and that it would be better if it were invested in scientific projects.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Provide reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

**note: please check my entire essay,pick out every single minor error that i've made and tell me how i can fix it. I know it's too long of an answer but i don't know what to cut out,also should i stated my opinion at the end of the essay? Thank you for your support Emotion: smile

Answer:

Nowadays, some people believe that arts should be funded by the government and big companies. Others find that view uneconomical and the money should be invested in scientific researches. Although there are advantages and disadvantages, both sides holds some remarkable points for their arguments.

On the supporters side, they argue that art holds a special position on our daily basis and there for, should be funded by the government and big companies. They reason that life is more than just existence, it must come along with joy. Arts are a very common and effective methods to bring happiness to everyone's life. Through arts, hash reality can be turned into colorful masterpieces like the famous "Starry Night" was painted when Van Gogh was living the darkest moments of his life behind the bars in an asylum or the famous "Symphony No5." written by Beethoven when he was deft. With government and companies funds, arts can be even more popularize, encourages people to create more arts, to live more productive, positive lives.

On the other side, people argue that a productive and happy live can and should be achieved by new scientific achievements that improves life quality. Arts do contribute to our happy lives but they are profitable for artists and they don't need the resources from society to sustain itself. Scientific projects on the other hand is heavily depended on sponsorships to creates changes and developments which drastically improve our lives better than arts. With that same amount of money, government and big companies should invest it in scientific projects to bring more value to society.

In my opinion, arts shouldn't receive money from government and big companies. Arts just drives us away from harsh life, get us a moment of joy to enjoy existence, not solving the problems. With proper amount of money invested into science, we alter the future.

Long story short, some people think that the arts should be funded because it promotes a positive way of looking at the world. Others thinks that money should be invested in scientific projects as it is more practical to solve the problem than to look at it differently.

An academic essay is a highly structured text. Every sentence you write has a particular role (job). Take a look at my replies in the links below to get an ideas about that.

https://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayAgreeDisagreeYoungEnjoyLife-Older/bjnlwx/post.htm

https://www.englishforums.com/English/CanAnyoneCheckEssay/bwpzmg/post.htm

Your ideas must be convincing, and if you aiming for a high grade, then they must be compelling. Therefore, the first thing you should do is brainstorm and pick out the best ideas you can come up with to include in your essay. I suggest you do that here too.


Arts should receive money from government and companies because
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It is better to invest in scientific projects because

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Try to fill in the above lists with as many relevant points as you can think of. Don't write full sentences or worry about the grammar for now. This is just rough work. Post below.

Arts should receive money from government and companies because
1- Arts brings joy, a different looking glass through harsh reality

2- Easily popularized -> effective method to make more people happy with their lives


It is better to invest in scientific projects because

1- Arts provides a looking glass, science brings the solution

2- With the same amount of money, science can bring more benefits

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Unknown VNArts should receive money from government and companies because1- Arts brings joy, a different looking glass through harsh reality2- Easily popularized -> effective method to make more people happy with their lives

Those two points appear to be the same. You need to think of separate ideas/points. Can you come up with another one?

Unknown VNIt is better to invest in scientific projects because1- Arts provides a looking glass, science brings the solution2- With the same amount of money, science can bring more benefits

Those are vague, and again appear to talk about the same thing. Try to think of two distinct and tangible reasons as to why the government should invest in scientific projects.

I really don't have anymore idea, maybe you can suggest me some to write. Also, can you give me some tips writing an as good as possible essay when I don't have idea to write ( because I might be in that situation in the exam room). By the way, I'm concern about my wordform, word-use and grammar in the essay above too so maybe you can have a check on that?

For example:

Arts should receive money from government and companies because

1- Many artists are unappreciated and underpaid

2- Arts give people pleasure

3- Arts are a reflection of culture and traditions

4- Arts funding is not very expensive

It is better to invest in scientific projects because

1- Improved standard of living

2- better healthcare

4- improved education

3- stronger economy

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You can use some of those in your paragraphs, but before you do that, I'd like you to write the topic sentences (first sentences) for each of your two body paragraphs. Reread my suggestions in the links above.

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