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Topic : The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


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My essay:

A glance at pie chart provided reveals the amounts of CO2 emitted by each person in 4 countries( United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007. Units are measured in mectric tonnes.

Overall, over the period, British emitted the biggest amount of CO2 to the environment while the level of emissions is lowest in Portugal. It is interesting to note that the amounts of CO2 emissions emitted in UK and Sweden decreased while those of Italy and Portugal increased.

Soaring from approximately 8 mectric tonnes in 1967 to over 10 mectric tonnes in 1977, the rate of CO2 emissions in Britain then plummeted to somewhere in the vicinity of 5 mectric tonnes in 2007. The Sweden’s emission, meanwhile, saw a slight decline over the period, from above 11 mectric tonnes in 1967 to less than 9 mectric tonnes in 2007.

On the other hand, starting at the low of just 1 mectric tonnes in 1967, the amount of CO2 emission per persion in Portugal grew rapidly to nearly 6 mectric tonnes in 1997. The next decade brougt a small growth in this figure. A similar trend was seen in Portugal, where the level of CO2 emitted by each people rose significantly from above 4 in 1967 to under 8 mectric tonnes in 1997, before remaining unchanged in the end of the period.

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A glance at (Do not begin a formal essay with glancing at something.) pie chart (Do you know the difference between a bar chart, pie chart and line graph?) provided reveals (Not a good word choice for a math/science essay) the average amounts of CO2 emitted per person by each person in 4 (Write out small numbers in words if they are not data values.) countries( United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007. Units are measured in mectric tonnes.

Overall, over the period, the British emitted the biggest highest amount of CO2 to the environment while the level of emissions is lowest in Portugal. It is interesting to note that (Those words are unnecessary. Just describe the data.) the amounts of CO2 emissions emitted in UK and Sweden decreased while those of Italy and Portugal increased.

Soaring from approximately 8 mectric tonnes in 1967 to over 10 mectric tonnes in 1977, the rate (wrong word) of CO2emissions in Britain then plummeted to somewhere (That is very vague. In math/science writing, it is important to be exact.) in the vicinity of 5 mectric tonnes in 2007. The Sweden’s emission, meanwhile, saw (Wrong word. Emissions do not have eyes. They cannot see anything.) a slight decline over the period, from above 11 mectric tonnes in 1967 to less than 9 mectric tonnes in 2007.


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Model for "overall" paragraph. Note that I use an abbreviation for the units, having defined it first. This avoids a lot of tedious repetition.

The differences in the average emissions among the four countries narrowed over the period. In 1967, the highest emitter was the UK, at about 11 metric tonnes per person (MT pp), and the lowest was Portugal at a little over one ton. In 2007, the UK had lowered its emissions to a bit under 8 MT pp, but Portual's emissions had more than quadrupled to just under 6 MT pp. Sweden lowered its emissions the most. In 1967, it ranked second at about 9 MT pp, and it tied with Portugal for the lowest in 2007 at about 5.5 MT pp.

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Is this sentence wrong ?

the amounts of CO2 emitted by each person “ I saw many sample answer on the Internet use ‘by each person’

anonymous“ the amounts of CO2 emitted by each person “

The scientific phrase is "per person." That is what you should use. In math / science contexts it is more important to be precise and consistent than to use a variety of phrases which have different shades of meaning.