In many countries, people now wear western clothes such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?
Western fashion has gained its prevalence these days as people in numerous nations eschew indigenous clothes in favour of western items. From my perspective, this is an inevitable result of the extensive integration and there are adverse impacts closely linked with it.
The underlying reason for this growing trend is the widespread fashion integration. In light of globalization, integration in all aspects has been facilitated and fashion is not an exception. Hence, clothing items from popular labels in developed countries, mostly western ones, have been continuously imported to other states, leading to their great availability and massive number that overwhelm the local market. In addition, being superior countries, western countries’ fashion items or styles, are widely considered standards. This results in people favouring them over traditional ones to be more trendy and fashionable.
The preference for western-style clothes entails the loss of a part of cultural identity and the deprivation of creativity in fashion market. Unique costumes have long been considered a precious part of national culture. Provided that people are indifferent to these traditional items, they will gradually fall into disuse. Consequently, this precious part of the indigenous culture will sink into oblivion without being passed on to later generations. Besides, as people adopt the same fashion styles and clothes from foreign countries, namely suits or jeans, there will be no longer demand for novel and creative designs in local markets. Fashion designers’ motivation and job opportunities will, therefore, be undermined. As a result, this tendency runs the risk of hindering fashion sector’s development as a whole.
To sum up, as fashion intertwining is undergoing a proliferation worldwide, it is of great significance for every country to preserve their own distinguishable features reflected in clothing to avoid cultural values loss and promote fashion diversity.
chanhleoo Is this a positive or negative development?
Please answer the prompt clearly in the first paragraph so the examiner will know your position.
Western fashion has gained its prevalence these days as people in numerous (awkward, unnatural) some nations have stopped wearing eschew (not a good word choice.) indigenous clothes in favour of western attire. items. From my perspective, this is an inevitable result of globalization. the extensive integration and In my view, it is is a negative development because of the many there are adverse impacts closely linked with it. You did not answer the prompt. The question is: is this negative or positive? - not do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
The underlying reason for this growing trend is the widespread depiction of successful, happy and well-to-do people wearing western fashion. integration. (wrong word) In light of globalization, integration in all aspects has occurred / happened been facilitated and fashion is not an exception. Hence, clothing items from popular labels in developed countries, mostly western ones, have been continuously exported to all corners of the globe imported to other states, leading to their great availability in and massive number that overwhelm (That is quite awkward. ) the local market. In addition, being superior countries, western countries’ fashion items or styles, are widely considered standard attire for businessmen and women. s. This results in people favouring them over traditional styles ones to be more trendy and fashionable.
The preference for western-style clothes entails the loss of a part of cultural identity and the deprivation of less creativity in the fashion industry. fashion market. Unique costumes have long been considered a precious part of national culture. Provided that (incorrect) If people are indifferent to these traditional items, they will gradually fall into disuse. Consequently, this precious part of the local / native indigenous culture will sink into oblivion without being passed on to later generations. Besides, as people adopt the same fashion styles and clothes from foreign countries, namely suits or jeans, there will be no longer demand for novel and creative designs in local markets. Fashion designers’ motivation and job opportunities will, therefore, be undermined. As a result, this tendency runs the risk of limiting the development of new trends in the fashion industry. hindering fashion sector’s development as a whole. (Awkward)
To sum up, as fashion intertwining (wrong word) western fashions are becoming ubiquitous in every country, and this is not a positive development because of the loss of cultural uniqueness and the suppression of further development of the industry. (The task did not ask for a recommendation or a solution. The next sentence is off-target. Just summarize your argument points.) is undergoing a proliferation worldwide, it is of great significance for every country to preserve their own distinguishable features reflected in clothing to avoid cultural values loss and promote fashion diversity.
chanhleoo Thank you. Can you kindly give me some feedback on my arguments and flow of the essay?
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