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The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of the people aged from 16 to over 75 who participated in music concerts over 6 years period.

It is clear that the people from 16 to 44 years old went to music concerts much more than the other groups. In addition, the over-75-year-olds was the lowest age group in each year.

In 2010, the 25 to 44 years old group accounted for over 50%, while the two age groups, including 16 to 24 and 45 to 54 years old, made up the lower percentage at 40%. The proportion of those aged 16 to 24 ascended continually by 70% in 2015. By contrast, there was a decrease of around 10% in the percentage of the 25 to 44 years old and the 45 to 54 years old group in 2011 before rose significantly by over 50% and under 50% in 2015, respectively.

The people from 55 to 64 years old made up over 20% in 2010, while this figure for the over-75-year-olds just under 10%. In the rest of the period, the percentage of those aged 55 to 64 still remained at 20%; by contrast, the figure for those older than 75 grow to reach a peak of nearly 20%.

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Topic: The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015

The line graph illustrates the proportion of the people aged from 16 to over 75 who participated in music concerts over 6 years period.

It is clear that the people from 16 to 44 years old went to music concerts much more than the other groups. In addition, the over-75-year-olds was the lowest age group in each year.

In 2010, the 25 to 44 years old group accounted for over 50% while the two age groups, including 16 to 24 and 45 to 54 years old, made up the lower percentage at 40%. The proportion of those aged 16 to 24 ascended continually by 70% in 2015. By contrast, there was a decrease of around 10% in the percentage of the 25 to 44 years old and the 45 to 54 years old group in 2011 before rose significantly by over 50% and under 50% in 2015, respectively.

The people from 55 to 64 years old made up over 20% in 2010, while this figure for the over-75-year-olds just under 10%. In the rest of the period, the percentage of those aged 55 to 64 still remained at 20%; by contrast, the figure for those older than 75 grow to reach a peak of nearly 20%.

What about the people aged 65-74? Where are they?

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The line graph illustrates (wrong verb. Illustrate is for process maps, diagrams, and pictures, not for plots.) the proportion of the people aged from 16 to over 75 (incorrect. It is not all the people in this age range.) who participated in (That means they played an instrument or sang on stage. Is that what is on this graph?) music concerts over 6 years period. (When? From 1944-1950? or 1966-1972? Or something else?)

It is clear that ("Clear" is an opinion word. Do not write opinions in Task 1) the people from 16 to 44 years old (You need to add that these represent two groups, otherwise, the reader is confused.) went to music concerts much more than the other groups. (You have not mentioned any age groups. The reader is confused.) In addition, the over-75-year-olds was the lowest age group (wrong phrase. It makes no sense.) in each year.

In 2010, the 25 to 44 years old group accounted for over 50%, (wrong phrase. 50% of the audience?) while the two age groups, including 16 to 24 and 45 to 54 years old, made up the lower percentage (percentage of what?) at 40%. The proportion of those aged 16 to 24 ascended (not a good word) continually by (wrong preposition. If something increases by 70%, it goes from, for example from 10% to 17%, since 7% is 70% of 10%) , e.g. 70% in 2015. By contrast, there was a decrease of around 10% in the percentage of the 25 to 44 years old and the 45 to 54 years old group between 2010 and 2011) in 2011 before rose (wrong verb form) significantly by over 50% and under 50% in 2015, respectively.

The people from 55 to 64 years old made up over 20% (20% of what?) in 2010, while just under 10% of this figure (wrong word) for the over-75-year-olds. just under 10%. In the rest of the period, the percentage of those aged 55 to 64 still remained at 20%; by contrast, the figure (wrong word) for those older than 75 grow to reach had a peak of nearly 20% in 2011.

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Sample essay

The line graph compares the relative attendance at music concerts for people in five different age groups between 2010 and 2015. The age groups are 16-24, 25-44, 55-64 and over 75. There is no data for the age bracket 65-74.

Overall, proportionately more people in the youngest group went to concerts compared to any of the other groups from 2011-2015. The group which had the lowest percentage of attendees throughout the entire period was the oldest group.

In detail, considering the first and last years of the period, attendance went up in three of the groups, and remained about the same in the other two, 25-44 and 55-64. The youngest group had the greatest increase, from 40% to 70% and for the other two groups (45-54 and 75+) it was the same, 10% However the values were different: 40-50% and 10-20% respectively. The curve for the age group 25-54 is interesting in that there was a significant dip in 2011; otherwise the curve was flat, averaging around 52%. In contrast, the curve for the 75+ group had a peak at 20% in that year.