Government should spend money on railways rather than roads.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Railways have become one of the most important, commonly used modes of communicating and goods carriage over a long, as well as, short distance. Some people believe that governments should invest more money in it than roads. I completely disagree with this idea for the following reasons.

Rail transport has some disadvantages compared to other types in the eyes of primary passengers. In some countries, most of the residents have their vehicles ( a good example of this approach is Vietnam in which more than 80% of the population own at least one mean of transport), which lead to less use of public transport, especially in urban areas or a short distance. Besides, train stations are located in a permanent position which is sometimes inconvenient for many people living far from these places. Also, there is no denying factor that the price of train tickets is much more expensive than that of buses. It is 33.000 VND for a bus ticket traveling from Ha Noi to Hai Duong province (75km) while using train we have to pay 56.000VND, for instance.

According to economic perspectives, there are some limitations to railways compared to other roads. First, rails are installed permanently so all of the trains have to follow the unchanged directions which leads to the difficulty of transporting goods from one factory to another if their locations can not be in this way. Second, many companies that produce agricultural and fishery products do not choose railways as their mean of transport because carriage by trains takes much time (6-7 days), which can make their goods less fresh or even become rotten, while the expense of railways is not cheaper than other roads. Finally, preparing and packing goods in the containers of trains are complicated and require many workers, which leads to an increase in the expense of this means of transport.

In conclusion, railways bring some benefits but not competitive enough when comparing with roads in many aspects. The government should consider investing money compatibly for each type.

erichanTo what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even contradict yourself.

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You need to focus on the length of your essays. Practice writing 260-290 words for Task 2, no longer. That will give you time in the exam room to proofread your essay, improve the sentences and fix silly mistakes. It will help you to be focused on the topic and not repeat.



Railways have become one of the most important, commonly used modes of communicating (I don't understand. Do you mean that they carry letters? Modes of communication are speaking and writing.) and goods carriage (unnatural) over a long, (wrong punctuation) as well as, (wrong punctuation) short distances. Some people believe that governments should invest more money in it (wrong pronoun) than roads. I completely disagree with this idea. (The format of an essay is to argue your reasons. It is bad form to tell the examiner what an essay contains.) for the following reasons.

Rail transport has some disadvantages compared to other types according to the in the eyes of primary (Are there secondary passengers?) passengers. In some countries, most of the residents have their personal vehicles ( a good example of this approach is Vietnam in which more than 80% of the population own at least one mean (Mean is a verb or an adjective. It is not a noun.) of transport), which lead (wrong form) to less use of public transport, especially in urban areas or when the trip is a short distance. (Poor cohesion and coherence. What do the passengers on the train say about the disadvantages?) Besides, train stations are located in places a permanent position which are is sometimes inconvenient for many people living far from these places. Also, there is no denying factor that the price of train tickets is much more expensive (Wrong. Prices cannot be described as "expensive". We do not buy prices, do we? Train tickets are more expensive than bus fare. The prices of train tickets are higher than bus tickets.) . than that of buses. It is 33.000 VND for a bus ticket traveling from Ha Noi to Hai Duong province (75km) while using train we have to pay 56.000VND for a train ticket, for instance.

According to economists, economic perspectives, there are some limitations to railways compared to other (A railroad is not really a road.) roads. First, rails are installed permanently so all of the trains have to follow the unchanged set routes directions which leads to the difficulty of transporting goods from one factory to another if their locations do not have rail service or a connecting spur line. can not be in this way. Second, many companies that produce agricultural and fishery products do not choose railways as their mean of transport because of the travel time carriage by trains takes much time (6-7 days), which can make their goods less fresh or even become rotten, while the expense of railways is not cheaper than other roads. Finally, preparing and packing goods in the containers of trains is are complicated and requires many workers, which leads to an increase in the expense of this means of transport.

In conclusion, railways bring some benefits but not competitive enough when compared comparing with roads in many aspects. The government should consider investing money compatibly for each type. (You need to restate your thesis that you completely disagree that governments should invest more in rail systems than highways. Remember your thesis statement and the essay question.


Overall, your essay will not get a good score because you failed to address the topic directly.

The topic was government investment in transportation networks. Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.

But there was not one single mention of government or investment or spending in your body paragraphs.

I could argue that the government should spend more money on the railway systems. If the government spent more money, the ticket prices would be lower, the trains would be faster and more frequent for rapid transit of perishable goods, and the network of rail lines would be more extensive to serve more people, even those in smaller communities.

Your essay was on a different topic:

In your country, the railroad system has more disadvantages than the road system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I have changed my essay and tried to make it shorter (308 words). Could you review it? Thank you so much.

Railways have become one of the most important, commonly used modes of transporting and carrying goods over long as well as short distances. Some people believe that government should invest more money in railways than roads. I completely disagree with this idea.

Rail transport should not be financed because of many disadvantages according to passengers. In some countries, most of the residents have their vehicles (a good example of this approach is Vietnam in which more than 80% of the population own at least one kind of transport), which leads to less use of public transport, especially in urban areas or when the trip is a short distance. Besides, train stations are located in places which are sometimes inconvenient for people living far from these places. Also, there is no denying that the price of train tickets is much higher than that of buses. It is 33.000VND for a bus ticket traveling from Ha Noi to Hai Duong (75km) while we have to pay 56.000 VND for a train ticket, for instance.

According to economists, government should invest more money in roads rather than railways due to some limitations to railways compared to roads. First, rails are installed permanently so all of the trains have to follow set routes which cause the difficulties of transporting goods from one factory to another if their locations do not have rail services of a connecting spur line. Second, many companies producing agricultural or fishery products choose roads instead of railways because of the travel time (6-7 days) while the expense of trains increases due to the complexity of packing goods in the containers. So railways are not a good choice that government aims at in economic growth.

In conclusion, railways are not competitive enough compared with roads. It is better if government spends much more money on roads than railways.

Railways have become one of the most important, commonly used modes of transporting people and carrying goods over long as well as short distances. Some people believe that the government should invest more money in railways than roads. I completely disagree with this idea.

Rail transport should not be financed (It is not about any financing, but more financing.) because of many disadvantages regarding passenger service. according to passengers. In some countries, most of the residents have their own vehicles (a good example of this approach is Vietnam in which more than 80% of the population own at least one kind of transport), which leads to less use of public transport, especially in urban areas or when the trip is a short distance. Besides, train stations are located in places which are sometimes inconvenient for people living far from these places. Also, there is no denying that the price of train tickets is much higher than that of buses. It is 33.000VND for a bus ticket traveling from Ha Noi to Hai Duong (75km) while we have to pay 56.000 VND for a train ticket, for instance. Thus, investments for public transportation should be prioritized to bus service and the road network.

According to economists, government should invest more money in roads rather than railways due to some limitations to railways compared to roads. In terms of transporting freight, trucks are superior to rail. First, the road network is much larger than the rail system. Rails are installed permanently so all of the trains have to follow set routes which cause the difficulties of transporting goods from one factory to another if their locations do not have rail services or a connecting spur line. Second, many companies producing agricultural or fishery products choose trucks / lorries roads instead of railways because of the faster travel time (sometimes a difference of 6-7 days) while the expense of trains increases due to the complexity of packing goods in the containers. So railways are not a good choice if that government aims at in economic growth in manufacturing and agriculture..

In conclusion, railways are not competitive enough compared with roads. It is better if government spends much more money on roads than railways.