The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

My essay:

It is evident that cars have always been ubiquitous worldwide since its first appearance in 1888. However, this has accidentally lead to an excessive amount of this mean of transport being purchased as time passed by, causing many unwanted problems. I believe that in order to alleviate this issue, alternative tranportation should be stimulated and a legislation of limiting cars should be internationally implemented.

First, by increasing the number of other possible transports, it would be extremely beneficial for both the authorities and individuals. For example, public transportation such as buses would be an effective replacement as it can contain more passengers in a ride. Moreover, it can also be an influential remedy for the recent global warming pheonmenon due to the significant decrease in exhaust fumes caused by cars. The environment will definitely suffer less if a reduction in cars happens.

However, despite many detrimental effects, it is obvious that cars still play a vital role in accommodating people's need of using private transport. Because of that, prohibiting cars completely is not an appropriate option. In place of that, it is reasonable to enforce laws that can restrict the quantities of cars being purchased by ownership. For instance, regardless of individuals' financial status, the law should be equally applied to everyone by only allowing approximately two cars being bought in one family or including an expensive extra fees if a third one is aquired.

To conclude, alternative forms of transport being supported and international regulations being introduced is indispensably needed to avoid future inexorable problems in terms of transportation.

Dear Huongn04,

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It is evident that (That is a useless phrase. Avoid these dummy-it clauses. They add no content or value to your essay.) cars have always been ubiquitous worldwide (That is a false statement. In 1888, did millions of cars just poof into existence everywhere in the world by magic?) since its (wrong pronoun. ) first appearance in 1888. However, this has accidentally (wrong word.) lead to an excessive amount (wrong expression.) of this mean (wrong form.) of transport being purchased as time passed by, causing many unwanted problems. I believe that in order to alleviate this issue, (You did not answer the essay question. "To what extent do you agree?" You will lose a lot of points because you did not follow the instructions.) alternative tranportation should be stimulated (wrong verb) and a legislation of limiting cars should be internationally implemented.

First, by increasing the number of other possible transports, (wrong usage. Transport is not a thing that can be counted..) it would be extremely beneficial for both the authorities and individuals. For example, public transportation such as buses would be an effective replacement as it can carry contain more passengers in a ride. Moreover, it can also be an influential remedy for the recent global warming pheonmenon (wrong word.) due to the significant decrease in exhaust fumes emitted caused by cars. The environment will definitely suffer less if there is a reduction in the number of cars happens.

However, despite many detrimental effects, it is obvious that (That is a useless phrase. Avoid these dummy-it clauses. They add no content or value to your essay.) cars still play a vital role in accommodating people's need of using private transport. Because of that, prohibiting cars completely is not an appropriate option. In place of that, it is reasonable to enforce laws that can restrict the quantities of cars being purchased by ownership. (wrong word. Ownership does not have any ability to buy a car.) For instance, regardless of individuals' financial status, the law should be equally applied to everyone by only allowing approximately (??) two cars being bought in one family or including an expensive extra fees if a third one is aquired.

To conclude, alternative forms of transport being supported and international regulations being introduced is (wrong verb form. The subject is two things.) indispensably needed to avoid future inexorable problems in terms of transportation. You did not answer the essay question. "To what extent do you agree?" )


huongn04 By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads.

Are you sure you copied the topic correctly? It is sadly outdated. Here are the statistics of registered cars in the UK from 2000-2019.