Letter Topic:

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country.

Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You do NOT need to write any address.

You should write at least 150 words.

Letter:

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to gather information of seminar "Data Science In 2021" that is being held in New York City in the last week of December.

I have been actively following up with your e-mail notifications of the seminar's hot topics, however, I am in dire need of few more information here. It would be good to have a detailed schedule of the seminar topics along with the date and time. Also, since I would be travelling from India, I would like to know about the accommodation arrangements that your partner SOHO Homes would be making. The website is also suggesting the discount, SOHO Homes would be giving to the employees of Neuro Science. Thus, kindly shed some more light on the modes of payment and by when the booking will start for both the seminar and accommodation.

I am very much looking forward to upgrade my knowledge in Data Science through this seminar. Hence, kindly help me in getting the aforementioned information.

Yours faithfully,

Vamika Pradhan

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Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to gather information of seminar (unnatural) "Data Science In 2021" that is being held in New York City in the last week of December.

I have been actively following up with your e-mail notifications of the seminar's hot (Hyperbole) topics, however, I am in dire (Hyperbole) need of few more information (unnatural) here. It would be good to have a detailed schedule of the seminar topics along with the date and time. Also, since I would be travelling from India, I would like to know about the accommodation arrangements that your partner SOHO Homes would be making. The website is also suggesting (Use simple present) the discount, SOHO Homes would be giving to the employees of Neuro Science. Thus, kindly shed some more light (casual) on the modes of payment and by when the booking will start for both the seminar and accommodation.

I am very much looking forward to upgrade (wrong word - you can upgrade a device, but not what is contained in your little grey cells.) my knowledge in Data Science through this seminar. Hence, kindly help me in getting the aforementioned (antiquated word) information.

Yours faithfully,

Vamika Pradhan

Thank you very much for this valuable feedback..

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It seems to me that these words can be in the context of politeness. I can recommend adding main theses, and exaggerated words stick together the official text well.