The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.


A glance at the bar chart depicts the hours the UK secondary schoolers spend texting on the Internet and playing on games consoles.


Overall, while the percentage of boys chatting was lower than that of boys playing games, the figures for girls witnessed an opposite pattern. Additionally, students investing more than 4 hours per day on each activity was by far the least common among other types.


It is significant to note there was a slight difference between girls’ and boys’ amount of time for chatting. Initially, the proportion of boys messaging for less than 1 hour was roughly a quarter, which was approximately equal to that for 1 to 3 hours. The least percentage of boys (5 percent) spent at least 4 hours per day texting, compared to that of girls, which was nearly one in ten. With regards to girls, about 35 and 25 percent of girls daily chatted for 1-3 and 0-1 hours respectively.


When it comes to playing on games consoles, a notable difference was seen in the hours that boys and girls are taken. The number of girls with at most 1 hour on games consisted of just under 40 percent, which was a mere 8 percent higher than the percentage of boys. Subsequently, the proportion of boys playing for 1-3 hours was over 40 percent, which was 3 times higher than that of girls. Finally, the figures for boys with at least 4 hours on consoles (over 10 percent) outnumbered that for girls (1 percent).

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A glance at the bar chart depicts (That is terrible! Glances do not depict anything. Besides a university math lecturer wants you to study the chart carefully, not just give it a short look! ) the hours the UK secondary schoolers (Not a good substitute) spend texting (Do not change the name of a category. Texting, messaging and chatting are not synonymous activities.) on the Internet and playing on games consoles.

(You did not mention that the chart shows both boys and girls. This is a stacked bar chart. You did not mention that the time is divided into three categories. Read my Task 1 advice.)

Overall, while the percentage of boys chatting was lower than that of boys playing games, the figures (wrong word. The measures are in percentages.) for girls witnessed (Only people can witness things. Figures cannot do this.) an opposite pattern. Additionally, students investing (wrong word - a investment is something that leads to beneficial results. It does not seem to me that time spent playing computer games applies.) more than 4 (Write out small numbers in words, if they are categories, not data values.) hours per day on each activity was by far the least common among other types.


It is significant to note there was a slight difference between girls’ and boys’ amount of time for chatting. Initially, the proportion of boys messaging for less than 1 hour was roughly a quarter, which was approximately equal to that for 1 to 3 hours. The least (Wrong word. The superlative "least" needs three things to compar. You have two - boys and girls) percentage of boys (5 percent) spent at least 4 hours per day texting, compared to that of girls, which was nearly one in ten. With regards to girls, about 35 and 25 percent of girls daily chatted for 1-3 and 0-1 hours respectively.

When it comes to playing on games consoles, a notable difference was seen in the hours that boys and girls are taken. (Wrong verb form.) The number (Wrong word.) of girls with at most 1 hour on games consisted of was just under 40 percent, which was a mere 8 percent higher than the percentage of boys. Subsequently, the proportion of boys playing for 1-3 hours was over 40 percent, which was 3 times higher than that of girls. Finally, the figures (Wrong word.) for boys with at least 4 hours on consoles (over 10 percent) outnumbered (Wrong word.) that for girls (1 percent).