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Prompt: Fashion and changing lifestyles

Do you think that fashion reflects changes in how people live? We would like to know how fashion in clothes has changed since your grandparents were young, and what this reveals about changes in society in your country.

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INDICATOR OF A BYGONE ERA

In my country,there was a time when monarchy was in existence.At that time,it was common practice that our forefathers were very subservient towards theirs rulers.As to fashion,they were not allowed to wear in a bright fashion,especially yellow because it was evocative of dominant power which only pertained to our rulers.In actuality,the vast majority of our ancestors were peasants so they mostly grativated more towards neutral one, which were more suitable for manual work.

FASHION IN MODERN DAY

In this day and age, our country is open to novelty Adolescents especially teen girls have total control of their choice in clothes.Moreover, we pay more attention to environmental and huminitarian aspects.Fisrt, we stress the importance of utilizing environment-friendly fabrics in the making of clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition bill .Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%.In my view ,most of fashion brands in my country can guarantee ethiticality.

FASHION IS A SYMBOL OF VARIOUS LIFESTYLES

It's common knowledge that fashion reflects changes in how people live.I am in favor of this perspective.For instance, i am a college student so i usually wear more comfy clothes such as pants and shirts,but my sister is a high-profile workers so she must follow a rigid dresscode at her work place.As she grows older and more mature, she dress in more feminine and elegent though in her college time she used to have the same sene of style as i do.

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You have a lot of spacing errors. You must put a space after an end stop (period), comma, and other punctuation marks. The only exceptions are quotation marks and the apostrophe. You have a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Besides, I do not understand how child labor and minimum-wage laws influence the choice of colors in clothing. You need to make a connection.

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INDICATOR OF A BYGONE ERA

In my country,there was a time when we had a monarchy was in existence.At that time,it was common practice that our forefathers were very subservient towards theirs rulers.As to fashion,they were not allowed to wear in a bright colors. fashion,especially yellow because it was evocative of dominant power which was reserved for the only pertained to our rulers.In actuality,the vast majority of our ancestors were peasants so they mostly grativated (spelling?) more towards neutral tones one, which were more suitable for manual work.

FASHION IN MODERN DAY

In this day and age, our country is open to new ideas. novelty Adolescents, especially teen girls, have total control of their choice in clothes.Moreover, we pay more attention to environmental and huminitarian aspects.Fisrt, we stress the importance of choosing utilizing environmentally-friendly fabrics in the making of clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition (What does this have to do with the topic?) bill .Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%.In (What does the minimum wage have to do with fashion?) my view ,most of fashion brands in my country can guarantee ethiticality.

FASHION IS A SYMBOL OF VARIOUS LIFESTYLES

It's common knowledge that fashion reflects changes in how people live.I am in favor of this perspective.For (You are in favor of common knowledge? That does not make sense. ) instance, i (What does the ninth letter of the alphabet have to do with the topic?) am a college student so i usually wear more comfy clothes such as pants and shirts,but my sister is a high-profile workers (wrong form. Your sister cannot be two people.) so she must follow a rigid dresscode at her work place.As she grows older and more mature, she dress in more feminine and elegent (Elegant is an adjective. It requires a noun.) though in her when she was in college time she used to have the same sene of style as i (The the ninth letter of the alphabet does not do anything.) do.

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Fisrt, we stress the importance of choosing utilizing environmentally-friendly fabrics in the making of clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition (What does this have to do with the topic?) bill .Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%.In (What does the minimum wage have to do with fashion?) my view ,most of fashion brands in my country can guarantee ethiticality.

I add 2 aforementioned aspects because I want to guarantee the validity of my country's fashion industry of ethiticality.

Can you give me the reason why do you think it's irrelevant to the topic? Thank you

Cinder NguyenCan you give me the reason why do you think it's irrelevant to the topic?

The topic is: How has fashion in clothes changed over the past two generations?

You wrote about a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%.

Do you mean if people earn more money, they can afford designer clothes and accessories? Or maybe they can buy the latest fashions every year instead of wearing the same clothes they did the previous year? Or maybe they can have a very large wardrobe, so they can wear something different every day.
You have to make some connection to fashion - what people wear.

Fisrt, we stress the importance of choosing environmentally-friendly fabrics in the making clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition bill. In my view, the aforementioned can lend credence to our country's fashion industry. Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%, which means that we can buy the latest fashions every year instead of wearing the same clothes they did the previous year.

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Fisrt, we stress the importance of choosing environmentally-friendly fabrics in the making clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition bill. In my view, that the aforementioned (Forget the word "aforementioned". Do not use it. It is not a word that any native speaker would use in an essay. It is old-fashioned and stiff. Native speakers use pronouns, not awkward phrases such as "previously mentioned".) can lend credence to our country's fashion industry. Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%, which means that we can buy the latest fashions every year instead of wearing the same clothes they did the previous year.


It is still straying off-topic. You need points that are more focused directly on the topic. The garment industry is not the topic. What your ancestors wore as compared to the fashion choices of the present generation is the topic.

You have spacing and spelling mistakes.


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Our ancestors, up to the early 20th century, did not have the choice of artificial fabrics such as rayon and polyester. They wore clothes made of natural plant fibers such as linen and cotton or animal fibers such as wool from sheep and goats. It was common for the women to sew their family's clothes since ready-made clothing was very expensive. They also had a limited wardrobe, perhaps three or four blouses or shirts and the same number of skirts or trousers in very simple, practical styles. Clothes had to serve them for a long time and they were worn until they were stained and or torn. As children outgrew their clothes, they handed them down to younger brothers or sisters, or gave them away to relatives. Some materials, such as silk, were very costly, so a woman may have only one silk dress for special occasions. Our parents wore clothes of polyester or blends because they were inexpensive, soft and cool in hot climates, and could easily be laundered. They also could afford to be fashion-conscious because automated factories produced inexpensive garments. In contrast, the present generation is more aware of the impact that clothing manufacture has on the environment, so they are choosing clothes made of natural materials. However, they buy the latest fashions, imitating the pop stars and celebrities whose preferred colors and styles change with every new season.