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Adolescents’ Rebelliousness towards Parents

As children enter adolescence, their relationship with their parents takes a new turn. From a quiet, obedient child, the adolescent becomes their critic. Some rebel if parents force their decisions on them. They pose stiff resistance when parents coerce them to do things which themselves do not practice. When parents advise them to refrain from doing things which did not entail harm or disapproval during their childhood, adolescents see it as inconsistency.

Adolescents want their parents to give them complete freedom in their decisions. While some parents give them this freedom, some believe that they are not mature enough to make decisions independently. Parents think they should guide their children in what course they should pursue, what career they should choose, and what kind of person they should select as their life partner. So, when they insist them to consider their advice, they feel frustrated and become rebellious. Sometimes, this takes them into depression or suffer other psychological problems.

Adolescents become highly critical when parents change their viewpoint. For instance, when parents ask them to stop being friends with certain persons if they have fallen into bad company or have cultivated bad habits, the adolescents see it as an inconsistency. Another example is that parents encourage their children wearing almost all kinds of outfits in their childhood, but they do not approve of certain kinds in adolescence as they are not appropriate to their age. While some adolescents understand their parents in this, some naively criticise them for the inconsistency.

Adolescents object when parents ask them to practice things which they do not. For example, some parents ask their children to cultivate the habit of reading saying it is highly rewarding. Children expect them to have cultivated the habit when they attach so much importance to it. However, for the parents, they want their children to make use of the resources and opportunities that they were not provided with when they were young. But, the adolescents who resist complying with their parents, do not understand this.

In conclusion, children’s rebellious behaviour towards their parents strains their relationship. In some cases, it leads to children getting into depression and parents suffering from serious psychological problems. Parents should consider the physical and mental development that their children undergo as they enter adolescence. This will enable them to think of appropriate measures to solve the misunderstandings between them.

The word "inconsistent" and various forms of it are not used appropriately. The pronoun usage gets really confusing. You also need to give more concrete examples.



As children enter adolescence, their relationship with their parents takes a new turn. From a quiet, obedient child, the adolescent becomes their critic. Some rebel if parents force their decisions on them. They pose stiff resistance when parents coerce them to do things which themselves do not practice. When parents advise them to refrain from doing things which were allowed when they were much younger, did not entail harm or disapproval during their childhood, adolescents see it as inconsistency.

Adolescents want their parents to give them complete freedom in decision-making. their decisions. While some parents give them this freedom, some believe that they teenagers are not mature enough to make decisions independently. Parents think they should guide their children in what course they should pursue, what career they should choose, and what kind of person they should select as their life partner. So, when they insist, them to consider their advice, their sons and daughters they feel frustrated and become rebellious. Sometimes, this takes them into depression or suffer other psychological problems.

Adolescents become highly critical when parents change their viewpoint. For instance, when parents ask them to stop being friends with certain persons if they have fallen into bad company or have cultivated bad habits, the adolescents see it as an inconsistency. Another example is that parents encourage their children to wear wearing almost all kinds of outfits in their childhood, but they do not approve of popular teenage fashions, such as short skirts for girls and baggy jeans for boys. certain kinds in adolescence as they are not appropriate to their age. While some adolescents understand their parents in this, some naively criticise them for the inconsistency.

Adolescents object when parents ask them to practice things which they do not. For example, some parents ask their children to cultivate the habit of reading saying it is highly rewarding. Children expect them to have cultivated the habit when they attach so much importance to it. However, for the parents, they want their children to make use of the resources and opportunities that they were not provided with when they were young. But, the adolescents who resist complying with their parents, do not understand this.

In conclusion, children’s rebellious behaviour towards their parents strains their relationship. In some cases, it leads to children getting depressed into depression and parents suffering from serious psychological problems. Parents should consider the physical and mental development that their children undergo as they enter adolescence. This will enable them to think of appropriate measures to solve the misunderstandings between them.

AlpheccaStarsThe word "inconsistent" and various forms of it are not used appropriately.

Thank you, AlpheccaStars.

I too feel that is something is clearly wrong. But, I just want to see whether I have understood your observation correctly.


Example:

Parents asking them to stop being friends with those who have fallen into bad company does not make them inconsistent. Am I correct?

And, even when they ask them to avoid certain outfits they should not be seen inconsistent. Am I correct?

AlpheccaStarsThe pronoun usage gets really confusing.

I felt too. I will read the changes again and be more careful.

AlpheccaStarsYou also need to give more concrete examples.

I understand. I will do.

AlpheccaStarsBut, the adolescents who resist complying with their parents, do not understand this.

I should not have used the comma as the clause is restrictive.


Thank you very much for your comments and corrections.


Suresh

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vsureshI should not have used the comma as the clause is restrictive.

That is not the reason. You have one comma between the subject and verb. It detaches the subject from the predicate. Make sure you have an even number of commas in the subject phrase (zero, 2, 4, 6 ...)

vsureshAnd, even when they ask them to avoid certain outfits they should not be seen inconsistent. Am I correct?

They are inconsistent if on Monday they approve of the outfit, and strongly disapprove of the same outfit on Friday.

Inconsistent means to give conflicting messages over a rather short period of time.

Mr. Trump is inconsistent on his messages about wearing a mask. He first snubbed his nose at them, saying he wouldn't wear one. Months later, he conspicuously wore one in a visit to a military hospital, but then blatantly discarded it. Now he says that he recommends it rather unenthusiastically, but states he would not require anyone to wear one.

AlpheccaStars When parents advise them to refrain from doing things which were allowed when they were much younger, did not entail harm or disapproval during their childhood, adolescents see it as inconsistency.

Here, the way you have expressed shows their inconsistency. And, the way I have expressed it tells us that the parents did not have any role in the practice the children had when they were much younger. (I say they asked them to refrain from doing things...)

Am I correct?

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AlpheccaStarsIt detaches the subject from the predicate.

Got it. Thank you.