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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.





The line graph shows the number of visitors to the four international museums, Louvre, London Science Museum, Vatican Museum and Shenzhen Museum, from 1980 to 2015.

Of the four museums, Louvre stood first in attracting visitors in the period from 1980 to 2015. Starting with around eight million visitors in 1980, it went on to attract close to ten million in 2015. Unlike Louvre which maintained a steady increase, Vatican Museum which had around five million visitors in 1980, saw a significant increase to close to nine million in 2015.

While Louvre and Vatican Museum saw an increase in the visitors, London Science Museum which had four million visitors in 1980, saw the number decrease to two million in 2015. With three million visitors in 1980, Shenzhen Museum, which also saw a gradual dip, saw the number move up and touch almost the original mark in 2015.

The line graph shows the number of visitors to the four international museums the Louvre, the London Science Museum, the Vatican Museum and the Shenzhen Museum, from 1980 to 2015.

Of the four museums, the Louvre stood first in attracting visitors over that entire period. in the period from 1980 to 2015. Starting with around eight million visitors in 1980, it went on to attract close to ten million in 2015. Unlike Louvre which maintained a steady increase, The Vatican Museum which had around five million visitors in 1980, saw a significant increase to reach close to nine million in 2015.

While the Louvre and the Vatican Museum saw an increase in the number of visitors, the London Science Museum which had four million visitors in 1980, saw the number decrease to two million in 2015. Similarly, with three million visitors in 1980, the Shenzhen Museum , which also saw a gradual dip, saw with the number falling from an approximate four million initially to around three million by 2000, but then rising gradually to move up and touch almost the original mark in by 2015.

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Suresh

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