There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?


In daily routine life of human being, many sort of music is experienced in a country and in the globe. Music is solution of stress and known for its valuable feature of handling the tension and mental stress. Despite the variety in music, the traditional music is preferred over International music. This essay reflects the importance of music and the choice of traditional music over International music.

To start with, music is a phenomena, concept, and science or magic whatever is pronounced, is short for it. It is difficult to start and tell the benefit and miracle of music. First of all, it is pre-determined that music helps the individual to release tension and mental stress. This how it helps to oneself to rejuvenate by listening it. Moreover, music is the medium of livelihood for many people. Even this is an industry in every country. This how, least but not last, it helps to grow cultural harmony between people of many nations. And this is the same International music is doing.

Spreading the branches of music among nations help to grow peace, health and harmony and ultimately the growth in their economy. International music has crossed the boundaries of popularity among the nation and shining in the globe. Michel Jackson, Taylor Swift and Madona are few name in ocean of music who have made the people their followers. However, Traditional music diminishes the effect of International music. For example the India Bollywood old music is based on classical music. The music and the combination of lyrics makes the listener to follow them regardless to age, whether they are the children or the adults. Thus, despite of huge popularity of international music and choice of people for international music cannot bring any impact on lovers of traditional music.

The reason is the language which helps the countrymen to love traditional music and more than 80% of listener can understand only the country’s native language. Therefore, traditional music would always be the choice of people for any national over International music.

Your essay is difficult to read and understand. The English is quite unnatural. I have tried to make some edits to improve it. , but it still needs a lot of work.


In the daily routine of the average person, life of human being, ("Human being" is not a good word choice here.) many sort (wrong form) of music is experienced in a country and in the globe. (unnatural) Music is solution of can reduce stress and is known for its valuable feature of handling the tension and mental stress. (That makes no sense.) Despite the variety in music, the traditional music is preferred over International music. This essay reflects the importance of music and the choice of traditional music over International music.

Improper thesis statement. Never mention your essay, your writing, or what you are going to tell the reader in an academic essay. e.g.

I believe not only that music is important, but also that the traditional music of a culture is more important than music from international celebrities.

To start with, music is a phenomena, concept, and science or magic (Unnatural. I don't know what you mean.) whatever is pronounced, (wrong word) is short for it. (I don't understand this.) It is difficult to start and tell the benefit and miracle of music. First of all, it is pre-determined (wrong word - it has been proven that...) that music helps the individual to release tension and mental stress. This how it helps to oneself to rejuvenate by listening it. (Ungrammatical. I do not understand this sentence. Also, it can rejuvenate people who listen to it.) Moreover, music is the medium of livelihood for many people. Even this is an There is a vibrant music industry in every country. This how, least but not last, (wrong expression. Inappropriately used here - "last but not least") it helps to grow cultural promote harmony between people of many nations. And this is the same what international music is doing.

Spreading the branches of music among nations helps to grow peace, health and harmony and ultimately the growth in their economy. International music has crossed the boundaries of popularity (??) among the nation (wrong form) and shining in the globe. (Unnatural) Michel Jackson, Taylor Swift and Madona are few name (wrong form) in ocean of music who have made many the people their followers. However, Traditional (Traditional is a common adjective. It does not begin with a capital letter.) music diminishes the effect of International music. For example the old India Bollywood old music is based on classical music. The music combined with its and the combination of lyrics delights / captivates makes the listener to follow them regardless of to age, whether they are the children or the adults. Thus, in spite despite of the huge popularity of international music and choice of people for international music it cannot dissuade the bring any impact on lovers of traditional music.

The reason is the language which helps the countrymen to love traditional music and more than 80% of listener (wrong form) can understand only their country’s native language. (Do not introduce any new ideas in the concluding paragraph. Just summarize the body paragraphs.) Therefore, traditional music would always be the choice of people for any national over International music.

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