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Topic: Some people regard video game as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, howerver, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits

Nowadays, with the development about Internet, many games and education online are created. People have diffferent views about videos games. In my opinion, we can play game to relax but must maintain to study

Some people think playing game help their children on study and relax after school. On the one hand, video game can be both enteraning and education. That is a good side, but not many parents care about the game their children play. Some game is violent that is make their children are more and more violence, and then become one of bullying in their school

On the other hand, students can become adiction because they always want to play game. When the students come home, they do not help their parents to do housework and their homework. They are attracted by new scores and target in the game. Many children now spend many hours each day trying to progress through the level of a game

In conclusion, playing game will help you relax and have some enterainment, but it is seems to me that the the potential danger of video game are more sighificant than the possible benefits

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You wrote less than 200 words. The minimum word count is 250. This will lower your score.

Also, you must learn to use plural nouns. Many times you write the singular form when the plural for is required.

games = more than one game

a game = one particular game



Nowadays, with the development about Internet, (The topic is video games. Most video games are on devices like the X-Box and Playstation. They are not online. ) many games and education (wrong word) online are created. People have diffferent (spelling) views about videos games. In my opinion, we can play game ( either "a game" or "games." You make this mistake many times. ) to relax but must have enough time maintain to study (Where is the punctuation to end the sentence?)

Some people think playing game help (wrong form - helps) their children to on study and relax after school. On the one hand, video game can be both enteraning (spelling) and education. That is a good side, but not many parents care about the games their children play. Some game is ( plural!) violent that is make (Incorrect verb form) their children are more and more violence, (violence is a noun. You need the adjective) and then become one of bullying (wrong form. "bullying" is an bad action, not a person. You mean the person, "bully". ) " in their school (Where is the punctuation to end the sentence?)

On the other hand, students can become adiction (spelling. This is the incorrect form of the word. You need the adjective form. ) because they always want to play game. When the students come home, they do not help their parents to do housework and their homework. They are attracted by new scores and target in the game. Many children now spend many hours each day trying to progress through the level (one level?) of a game (Where is punctuation to end the sentence?)

In conclusion, playing game will help you relax and have some enterainment, (spelling) but it is seems to me that the the potential danger of video game are (subject and verb do not agree.) more sighificant (spelling) than the possible benefits (Where is the punctuation to end the sentence?)

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