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Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

My essay:

There is a difference in opinions as to whether students should live independently away from their parents while studying at college. Although many people agree with this, my view is that it depends on cultural background of the students.

It is very common for students to live far away from family at the early ages in Western – based culture. Especially, when they reach the age of 18, almost all youngsters choose to earn a living on their own. While many students decide to go on higher education and work their way through university, others earn money or gain valuable experience through part-time and full-time jobs. I believe that this practice is closely related to their further development and future success.

However, in many Asian countries such as Vietnam, where traditional values play an integral part in the lives of young people, I think the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. First, as most Vietnamese universities are located in the main cities such as Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh, students have to move to these cities to enroll in universities. As a result, family members have less chance to get together and share with each other. Youngsters can only visit their parents on some special occasions such as Tet holiday or Independent Day, etc. Moreover, when students do not work or study under parents’ supervision, some can fall behind with their study or drop out of college. Because they have little experience and living skills, they might easily fall prey for scams while pursuing tertiary education. I consider living away from home not only leads to the unfortunate disappearance of the country’s long-standing value, but it also cause a lot of serious accidents.

In conclusion, I argue that it is better for youngsters to live outside home while they are studying at university, although it has some negative impacts as well. In other words, it depends on where the students come from.


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Comments  

There is a difference in opinion as to whether it is preferable for students should to live independently away from their parents while studying at college. Although many people agree with this, my view is that it depends on the cultural background of the students.

On the one hand, it is very not uncommon for college students to live far away from family at the early ages in Western countries. – based culture. Especially, when they reach the age of 18, almost all youngsters some students choose to earn a living move out and live on their own. While many students decide to go on higher education and work their way through university, others earn money or gain valuable experience through part-time and full-time jobs. I believe that this practice is closely related to their further development and future success. [ I don't see how this supports your position.]

However, in many Asian countries such as Vietnam, where traditional values play an integral part in the lives of young people, I think the drawbacks of living away from one's family outweigh the benefits. First, as most Vietnamese universities are located in the main cities such as Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh, students from regional areas have to move to these cities to enroll study in universities. As a result, family members have less chance to get together and share be with each other. Those young sters students can only visit their parents on some special occasions such as Tet holiday or Independence Day. , etc. Moreover, when students do not work or study under their parents’ supervision, some can fall behind with their study or drop out of college. Because they have little experience and living few life skills, they might easily be led astray or fall prey for scams while pursuing tertiary education. Thus, I consider living away from home not particularly beneficial to students in Asian countries. not only leads to the unfortunate disappearance of the country’s long-standing value, but it also cause a lot of serious accidents.

In conclusion, I argue that it is better for youngsters to live outside home while they are studying at university, although it has some negative impacts as well. In other words, it depends on where the students come from. [ That's not a good conclusion. You just need to summarize your main findings in a conclusion. Fix the first body paragraph and try to redo the conclusion.]