Topic: The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree?

My essay:

It is true that never has our ecosystem been as fragile and as precious as it is today, and how to best address those critical issues is an ongoing debate. There are many ways to reduce environmental degradation, one of which is the higher cost of fuel. However, I personally disagree with this idea for a number of reasons, which will be outlined in this essay.


On the one hand, the idea that increases fuel price can solve the world’s environmental issues have a number of benefits if it works. Most fuel is non-renewable energy, the reliance on fossil fuel was the main cause of ecological crisis such as the greenhouse effect, air pollution, ozone layer depletion,… If the cost of fuel rises, the industrial operation reduces the dependence on fossil fuel, so there will be a huge positive impact on the environment. Much renewable energy can be given preference to save money. Therefore, environmental problems are supposed to be alleviated.


On the other hand, we can not assure that when we increase the price of fuel, companies will use the alternative sources of energy to manufacture or they simultaneously increase the cost of the output which will affect the customers, especially the poor and the vulnerable. As a result, a higher cost of fuel must not be the main measure of saving the ecosystem. It can be seen that many other solutions can also contribute to progress. Take for example, everyone can assist in the effort to alleviate environmental problems in the local community through simple actions such as recycling waste or planting a tree in their garden.


In conclusion, although increasing the cost of fuel can lead to numerous beneficial advantages, reducing the reliance on fuel alone is not the key to solve the problems. In my opinion, there is no best way to do this as different measures need to be taken at the same time.

Can you please check my essay and give me some advice. Thank you so much !!

It is true that (Those words add no content you your essay. It weakens your statement. Would you write something that is not true?) never has our ecosystem been as fragile and as precious as it is today, and how to best address those critical issues (What are the issues? Is a precious ecosystem some kind of problem?) is an ongoing debate. (There is no debate mentioned in the topic. This seems like a memorized phrase that you frequently use in essays. Examiners do not reward you for memorized text. ) There are many ways to reduce environmental degradation, one of which is the a higher cost of fuel. However, I personally disagree with this idea as there are other more effective measures. for a number of reasons, which will be outlined in this essay.(Do not mention your essay. The reader knows what an essay is and that you will write about your reasons for disagreement.. You need a strong thesis statement to introduce your body paragraphs, and give the reader an idea of your conclusion.)


On the one hand, the idea that increases in the fuel price can solve the world’s environmental issues have (wrong form. subject/verb mismatch) a number of benefits (I don't understand how an idea can have some benefits. It is using less fossil fuels that reap the environmental benefits, not the idea about it. ) if it works. Most fuel is non-renewable energy, the reliance on fossil fuel was (past tense? This is not a cause any more?) the main cause of the ecological crisis such as the greenhouse effect, (The greenhouse effect is a property of certain gasses, like methane and carbon dioxide. It is not an environment crisis.) air pollution, ozone layer (That is not caused by burning fossil fuels. The thinning of the ozone layer miles above the surface of the earth is caused by chlorofluorocarbons used in refrigerants..) depletion,… (Do not use ellipses in a formal essay. Do not use "etc." either.) If the cost of fuel rises, the industrial operation (unnatural expression) reduces the dependence on fossil fuel, so there will be a huge (Avoid "huge". It is a juvenile word.) significant and positive impact on the environment. Much Renewable energy can be given preference to save money. Therefore, environmental problems are supposed to be alleviated.


On the other hand, we can not be assured assure (wrong form) that when we increase the price of fuel, companies will use the alternative sources of energy. to manufacture (Manufacture needs an object. End the sentence here. Your next sentence has a new idea.) They may just or they simultaneously increase the cost of their products the output (wrong word) which will affect the customers, especially the poor and the vulnerable. As a result, For this reason, a higher cost of fuel must not be the main measure of saving the environment. ecosystem. It can be seen that Many other solutions can also be considered. contribute to progress. Take this one for example. Everyone can assist in the effort to alleviate environmental problems in the local community through simple actions such as recycling waste or planting a tree in their garden.


In conclusion, although increasing the cost of fuel can lead to higher use of renewable energy, numerous beneficial advantages, (wrong word) reducing the reliance on fuel alone is not the key to solve the problems. In my opinion, there is no best way to do this as different measures need to be taken at the same time.