Topic:

“Prevention is better than cure.”

Out of a country’s health budget, a large propotion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It can not be denied that reaseach and treatment need to have a great expense, so many people suggest that a great part of the health budget should be invested towards health education and precautionary measures. In my opinion, although prevention is the best therapeutic method and provide a healthier and happier society, research and treatment are also essential with some diseases are unpreventable.

One good reason why the authority should invest in preventative measure is because it is also indirectly boost the nation’s economic growth. As we know, the expenditure on remedies, lab tests, doctor’s fees and surgeons is massive. In fact, the government have to break the bank if the disease goes undetected and worsen at a later stage. However, the fortune can reduce if the administration pay a great attention to health education and prevention. For example, the more health campaigns are organized, the more dreadful disease such as AIDS or tuberculosis can be prevented. Hence it will create a happier nation, in other word a boost in the economy which is very important, especially for any country that desire to be leading.

On the other hand, with the diseases are not prevented the treatment is a vital approach. With regard to this issue, hypertension and diabetes are known to be a hereditary disease so there is an adequate support in the area of cure. By this way,not only the purse-strings whose patients can be loosened but also it make the treatment is more effective. Even the government-sponsored fund in the therapy is less than the others.

In conclusion, although it is essential for the government to fund a health education and precaution because of its role in ensuring a better nation, the importance of treating disease which can not be staved off, should not be abonded.

It can not be denied that reaseach and treatment need to have a great expense, (That makes no sense. ) Both medical research and treating the sick need to be funded, so many people suggest that a great part of the health budget should be invested towards health education and precautionary measures. In my opinion, although prevention is the best therapeutic (Prevention is not therapy. If you prevent disease successfully, you do not need any therapeutic measures. ) method and provide a healthier and happier society, research and treatment are also essential since / because / as with some diseases are unpreventable.

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One good reason why the government authority should invest in preventative measure (wrong form) is because it is also indirectly boost (ungrammatical verb form) the nation’s economic growth. As we know, the annual expenditure on remedies, lab tests, doctor’s fees and surgeons is very large. massive. In fact, the government have to go into debt break the bank (This is too casual. Do not use such informal expressions in academic essays.) if the a disease goes undetected and worsen (wrong form) at a later stage. However, the fortune (wrong word) can reduce if the administration pay (wrong form) a great attention to health education and prevention. For example, the more that health campaigns are organized, the more that dreadful disease (wrong form) such as AIDS or tuberculosis can be prevented. Hence it will create a happier nation, in other word (wrong form) a boost in the economy which is very important, especially for any country that desire (wrong form) to be leading.

On the other hand, with the diseases are not prevented (Ungrammatical. It is not grammatical to have a full clause as the object of a preposition. You must use a conjunction.) the treatment is a vital approach. With regard to this issue, hypertension and diabetes are known to be a hereditary disease (wrong form) so there is an adequate support in the area of cure. By this way,not only the purse-strings whose patients can be loosened (wrong expression. Purse strings do not have patients. Doctors and hospitals have patients. DO not use such casual expressions incorrectly in essays.) but also it make (wrong form) the treatment is more effective. (ungrammatical. Do not use a full clause as the direct object of "make".) Even the government-sponsored fund in the therapy is less than the others. (That makes no sense. )

In conclusion, although it is essential for the government to fund a health education and precaution because of its role in ensuring a better nation, the importance of treating disease (wrong form) which can not be avoided staved off, should not be abonded.