Topic: Writing IELTS task 1

My essay:

The line graph compares how much average time was spent to manufacture vehicle from four famous companies within 7 years from 1998 to 2005.

It can be seen clearly that there was a general downward trend in the amount of hours to produce one vehicle during the period. Toyota and Honda had the lowest hours at the beginning of the period and it was the same at the end.

With General Motor's factories, they produced one vehicle with the average time by 32 hours in 1998, the highest in four companies. Then, the figure decreased gradually until 2005 to 22 hours per vehicle. Between 1998 and 2001, time was spent on manufacturing of Ford company has slightly increase. It peaked at 31 hours per vehicle in 2001, then fell to 21 hours at the end of the period.

Meanwhile, both the average time of Toyota and Honda had a fluctuation. They took 22 hours per vehicle in 1998 then two factories had an opposite trend until 2001. After that, in 2002, time for producing one vehicle was also 24 hours. Since 2003, the amount had decreased unremarkable to 20 hours per vehicle in 2005, for both Toyota and Honda.

The line graph compares how much the average time was spent to manufacture a car vehicle from four famous companies within (wrong word) 7 years from 1998 to 2005. (Which car companies are shown? Your paragraph is not complete.)

It can be seen clearly that (Read my advice about these rather useless clauses.) there was a general downward trend in the amount of hours to produce one vehicle during the period. Toyota and Honda had the lowest number of hours throughout the entire at the beginning of the period. (There was no point during the period where Ford and General Motors had shorter production times. Be accurate!) and it was the same at the end.

With General Motor's factories, they produced one vehicle with the an average time by of 32 hours in 1998, the highest of the in four companies. Then, the figure (wrong word. Read my advice.) it decreased gradually until 2005 to 22 hours in 2005. per vehicle. (Avoid repetition. You do not need to repeat this phrase.) Between 1998 and 2001, time was spent on manufacturing of (Unnatural, poor English) Ford company had a slight has slightly increase. It peaked at 31 hours per vehicle in 2001, then fell to 21 hours at the end of the period. (Do not make a new paragraph. The topic has not changed.)

Meanwhile, both the average time of both Toyota and Honda had varied with a narrow range of 20 to 24 hours. a fluctuation. (wrong word. Read my advice.) They took 22 hours per vehicle in 1998 then the two diverged, Toyota increasing to 23 and Honda decreasing to 20 in 1999. Then they converged to reach the same value, 22, in 2001. factories had an opposite trend (incorrect. A trend is only one way - up or down.) until 2001. After that, in 2002, time for producing one vehicle peaked at was also 24 hours. Since 2003, the amount had decreased unremarkable (wrong word and wrong form.) to 20 hours per vehicle in 2005, for both Toyota and Honda.

thank you very much