Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

My essay:

Although there are some improvements and breakthroughs in agriculture fields, the world still suffers from aggressive poverty and famine, especially in some developing countries. In this essay, I will display the reason for this situation and propose some solutions to this problems.

One of the major reasons for the rise of world hunger is climate change. Even though various developments have been made in agriculture in the past few decades, food production is still heavily affected by severe weather events such as floods, violent hurricanes, prolonged droughts, and other natural disasters. These events destroy people’s crops and their harvests which make people in these area suffer from famine and poverty. Moreover, wars and conflicts are also the reasons for this problems. People living in war zones are often forced to leave their lands so that they have difficulty in making ends meet.

Governments and organizations should work together to reverse this issues. Firstly, a weather alert system should be developed in oder to warn the people about the upcoming natural disasters. This will make farmers have enough time to manage to face with the events. Secondly, governments should sent out researchers and scientists to the poor areas so as to collect data, analyze and propose most effective solution to a particular area. Last but not least, governments should enact new laws and stricter regulations, if possible, propose armistices to prevent community from violent attacks, social riots, conflicts and wars.

In conclusion, hunger and poverty mainly come from natural disasters and conflicts. Various approaches could be implemented to help fight world starvation, which are now taking place in a lot of areas around the globe.

Although there have been are (wrong tense) some improvements and breakthroughs in agriculture fields, (In the context of agriculture, a field is a plot of land for growing crops.) the world still suffers from aggressive poverty and famine, especially in some developing countries. In this essay, I will display the reason for this situation and propose some solutions to this problems.

Please delete this sentence and write a thesis statement.

One of the major reasons for the rise of world hunger (Off topic. The topic is about why hunger still exists - it has always existed - in spite of better farming techniques and development of higher-yielding plants.) is climate change. Even though various developments have been made in agriculture in the past few decades, food production is still heavily affected by severe weather events such as floods, violent hurricanes, prolonged droughts, and other natural disasters. These events destroy people’s crops and their harvests which make people in these area (wrong form) suffer from famine and poverty. Moreover, wars and conflicts are also the reasons for this problems. (wrong form) People living in war zones are often forced to leave their lands so that they have difficulty in making ends meet.

Governments and organizations should work together to reverse this issues. Firstly, First, a weather alert system should be developed in oder to warn the people about the upcoming natural disasters. This will make (wrong word - allow) farmers have enough time to manage to face (wrong expression) with the events. Secondly, Second, governments should sent out researchers and scientists to the poor areas so as to collect data, analyze it and propose the most effective solution for to a particular area. Last but not least, governments should enact new laws and stricter regulations, and if possible, propose armistices to prevent community from violent attacks, social riots, conflicts and wars.

In conclusion, hunger and poverty mainly come from natural disasters and conflicts. Various approaches could be implemented to help fight world starvation, which are (wrong form) now taking place in a lot of areas around the globe.


You did not give any examples from your own experience. The essay instructions asked you to do this. You will lose points.