Topic: Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?


My essay:

News on the internet is becoming more widespread to the public nowadays, but some people still believe that newspapers will continually be the most crucial source of news. To my mind, I don’t agree with this statement because both online news and conventional newspapers are equally important.
Online news has some strong points. First, it is a convenient source that provides citizens unlimited access, especially during the covid-19 pandemic, it allows people to approach the world’s situation without going outside. Second, online news is updated quickly, so using it is the most efficient way to catch up with the latest news and events that happened in daily life. Despite the disadvantages, it still has some drawbacks. Inauthenticity can be a big problem because the internet has so many sources of news that are formed by different people. That’s why some articles’ contents are distorted to cause controversy among the community and become famous.
On the other hand, first, while online news is tricky to reach in rural areas, newspapers can be more feasible. Especially, some people who are digital immigrants will find that reading paper news is more convenient. Second, the newspaper is the most authentic resource for the government to public important news, announcements, or decisions for it can be ensured about the reliability of the contents. On the contrary with the updating speed of news on the internet, newspapers are slower because it takes a long time to compile until it’s completely ready to be printed and delivered to the residents.
To summarize, I still disapprove of the idea because both online news and newspaper have pros and cons and online news will soon be as crucial as newspapers.

Obtaining news on the internet is becoming more widespread to the public nowadays, but some people still believe that newspapers will continually be remain as the most crucial source of news.

[ 1] To my mind, [ 2] I don’t I do not fully agree with this statement, because both online news and conventional newspapers are equally important.

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On the one hand, online news has some genuine advantages. strong points. First, it is a convenient source that provides people with instant news. citizens unlimited access, especially For example, during the COVID-19 pandemic, it allows people to approach the world’s it helped people to stay in touch with the situation without going outside. Second, online news is updated quickly, so using it is the most efficient fastest way to catch up with the latest news and events. that happened in daily life. [ 4] Despite the disadvantages, Nevertheless, it still has some drawbacks. Inauthenticity can be a big problem because Since the internet is so vast, it can be difficult to know which has so many sources of news to trust. that are formed by different people. That’s why some articles’ For instance, some websites tend to exaggerate or sensationalize content are distorted to cause controversy among the community and gain fame. become famous.

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On the other hand, [ 5] first, while online news is tricky to reach in rural areas,

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[ 1]: Do not use “To my mind” in IELTS writing.

[ 2]: Do not abbreviate in formal writing.

[ 3]: Use a blank line to clearly separate your paragraphs.

[ 4]: That is wrong (I think you meant to write “advantages”), and it is unnecessary.

[ 5]: In fact, the opposite is more likely to be true! Google “advantages of newspapers over online news”; get some useful ideas and examples, and re-organize the second body paragraph. After that, repost the revised essay below, if you like.