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Topic:

Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

My essay:

With the development of modern technology, it has become easier to work and study from home. In my opinion, this has positive impacts on our lives, although relying completely on them could be disadvantageous.

The advantage of using technology has changed people's standard of living. The major reason is that now people do not need to commute to work or school. This saves a lot of time for employees as well as students as they can connect to the internet and do their tasks comfortably from their home. Also, the spare time allows individuals to reflect upon themselves and bring productive changes in their daily routine such as going to gym and doing their hobby. Additionally, working or studying online makes the environment healthy as fewer people move out from their homes.

However, there are disadvantages of using technology. It impacts on health is of a serious concern. When people study or work from home, they become less active physically and increases the chance of developing health issues such as obesity, cardiac related issues. Therefore, many people are suffering from health related problems more than in the past. Technology creates distraction, for example, while studying or meeting on a Zoom call, individuals do not completely concentrate on their tasks due to engage in other activity.

To conclude, it is true that learning or working online can benefit people in a number of ways. it may also pose as distraction and concern with health issues. But people need to learn to not rely on technology and be more active.

You wrote the wrong essay type. That is not good for your band score.

There are five IELTS essay types. The task you have is "Type 1" or "Agree / disagree".

But you wrote an advantages/disadvantages essay. That is not correct. Learn the different types of essays because each requires a specific approach.

Here is a lesson on the five types how to write an agree/disagree essay.

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navy hat 310Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You did not clearly state your answer. You have to answer the prompt:

  1. In my opinion, it is a positive development.
  2. From my perspective, it is a negative development.

Next, give two reasons, one in each body paragraph, for your answer.


With the high-speed internet and personal computers, development of modern technology, (Modern technology can be electric cars or solar power. You need to be specific.) it has become easier to work and study from home. In my opinion, this has positive impacts on our lives, (That is not an answer to this prompt. ) although relying completely on them could be disadvantageous. (That is not an answer, either. )

You need to delete one of the body paragraphs.

If your position is that it is a positive development, delete the second one are replace it with a paragraph with another argument supporting your stance. You have three reasons. You need to pick two of them for the body paragraphs.

If your position is that it is a negative development, delete the first one are replace it with a paragraph with the most important argument supporting your stance.

The advantage of using technology (What kinds of technology? ) (Advantages do not change things. It is the use of computers and mobile phones that did this.) Using applications such as zoom, email, and the virtual classroom has changed people's standard of living. The major reason is that now people do not need to commute to work or school. This saves a lot of time for employees as well as students as they can connect to the internet and do their tasks comfortably from their home.

(Another reason) Also, the spare time allows individuals to reflect upon themselves and bring productive changes in their daily routine such as going to gym and doing their hobby.

(Another reason. But you need to explain your reasons with examples and more information.) Additionally, working or studying online makes the environment healthy as fewer people are on the road, commuting to work and school. move out from their homes.


However, there are disadvantages of using technology. (Delete if that is your thesis statement.)

You have two reasons to support "it is a negative development" - health and distractions.

Its impacts on health is of a serious concern. When people study or work from home, they become less active physically and increases the chance of developing health issues such as obesity, cardiac related issues. Therefore, many people are suffering from health related problems more than in the past.

Technology creates distraction, for example, while studying or meeting on a Zoom call, individuals do not completely concentrate on their tasks due to engage in other activity.

You have to rewrite the conclusion. Restate your answer to the prompt and summarize the main reasons for your answer.

To conclude, it is true that learning or working online can benefit people in a number of ways. it may also pose as distraction and concern with health issues. (The task did not ask you to give advice. The next sentence is off-topic.) But people need to learn to not rely on technology and be more active.

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Topic:

Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

My essay:

With the advancement in the IT technology, the electronic devices such as personal computers and high speed internet have become cheaper and easily available. Therefore, more people around the world are working or learning from their homes. From my perspective, it is a positive development.

Using applications such as zoom, email, and the virtual classroom has changed people's way of living. The major reason is that now people do not need to commute to work or school. This saves a lot of time for employees as well as students as they can connect to the internet and do their tasks comfortably from their home. Therefore, they can use their spare time to reflect upon themselves and bring productive changes in their daily routine such as spending quality time with family and friends, going to gym and doing their hobby.

Another reason is that working or studying online has positive impact on the environment. This has made the environment healthier as fewer people are on the road, commuting to work and school. For example, during COVID people were working and studying from home. Therefore, the use of personal and public transportation was less, which led to low emission of carbon dioxide and other gases. Hence, improving the quality of air, making the environment healthier for people.

To conclude, remotely working and learning is a positive development as people can spend good quality time with family and friends creating an emotional bond and living a healthier lifestyle. Also, it helps to make the environment pollution free.

You did it just right! That is a good way to respond to an "agree/disagree" opinion essay.


If you are very very ambitious, you can attempt an answer "I agree 70% and disagree 30%".

This requires advanced writing skills. If you want a 7.5 or above, you need to demonstrate this level of skill with a "mostly agree/disagree" approach.

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With the advancement in the IT information technology, (IT = Information Technology.) the electronic devices such as (The internet is not a device.)personal computers and high speed internet have become cheaper and easily available. Therefore, more people around the world are working or learning from their homes. From my perspective, it is a positive development.

Using applications such as zoom, email, and the virtual classroom has changed people's way of living. The major reason is that now people do not need to commute to work or school. This saves a lot of time for employees as well as students as they can connect to the internet and do their tasks comfortably from their home. Therefore, They can use that additional their spare time to reflect upon themselves and bring productive changes in their daily routine such as spending quality time with family and friends, going to gym and doing their hobby.

Another reason is that working or studying online has a positive impact on is much better for the environment. This has made the environment healthier as fewer people are on the road, commuting to work and school. For example, during COVID people were quarantined and not going out. working and studying from home. (Repetitious. Give your ideas in different words.) Therefore, The use of personal and public transportation was less, which led to lower than normal emissions of carbon dioxide and other gases. Hence, improving the quality of the air improved, making the environment healthier for people.

To conclude, remotely working and learning is a positive development as people can spend good quality time with family and friends creating an emotional bond and living a healthier lifestyle. Also, it helps to make the environment pollution free.

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