It's a humble and genuine request if possible to provide band score so I know my stand. Thank You.

My essay:

The plan depicts the transformation of Grange Park from its first opening in 1920 to the present time.

Overall, the Grange Park have been modernized with new up to date infrastructure.

The park has two entrances at Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street that has remained unchanged. However, a side entrance to the right of Eldon Street have been constructed to provide access for underground car park users. To the right of the park beside the Eldon entrance, there were once a glasshouse and seats is now replaced by a water feature. Opposite, of it are café and children’s play area where there used to be pond and rose garden.

At the center of the park a rose garden surrounded with seats is present where once a fountain was a central piece. To the left of the park, the stage for musicians is converted into Amphitheatre for concerts. The seats and rose garden near the Eldon entrance is removed. The rose garden beside the Arnold entrance has remained unchanged.

The plan (wrong word) depicts the transformation (wrong word. The park is still a park. It is not a high-rise apartment block) of Grange Park from its first opening in 1920 to the present time.

Overall, the Grange Park have (wrong verb form) been modernized with new up to date infrastructure. (Wrong word. Infrastructure is for cities or countries - transportation infrastructure is public transport, airports and highways. Health care infrastructure is hospitals and outpatient clinics. There is infrastructure for utilities ad public services - telephone, internet, water treatment and sewage.)

The park has two entrances at Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street that has (wrong verb form) remained unchanged. However, a side entrance to the right of (wrong expression. It makes no sense. ) Eldon Street have (wrong verb form) been constructed to provide access for to an underground car park. users. To the right of the park (The area to the right of the park is not shown on either map. The map only shows the park itself and boundary streets. ) beside the Eldon entrance, there were once a glasshouse and seats is now replaced by a water feature. Opposite, (wrong comma - also wrong word since opposite could be to the north/ south or east/west) of it are café and children’s play area where there used to be a pond and rose garden.

At the center of the park a rose garden surrounded with seats is present where once a fountain was a central piece. To the left of the park, (The area to the left of the park is not shown on either map. The map only shows the park itself and boundary streets. ) the stage for musicians is (wrong verb form) converted into Amphitheatre for concerts. The seats and rose garden near the Eldon entrance is (wrong verb form) removed. The rose garden beside the Arnold entrance has remained unchanged.


For maps that show parks, cities, and other outdoor areas, you have to use compass directions for relative locations.

Cohesion and coherence is lacking.
You make many mistakes with simple verb forms and vocabulary. Tense usage is not consistent. You will not get a good score for Grammar Range and Accuracy and Lexical Resource.

Task response is ok.

Sample essay

Paragraph 1: Describe the figure (two maps)
Paragraph 2: Point out two or three main features.
Paragraph 3: Provide some details, but focus on comparisons.


The two maps depict Grange Park as it was when it opened in 1920 compared to the present day. This public park is bounded on the north by Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street on the south.

Overall, in 1920, the park was dominated by garden areas, with three rose gardens, a water lily pond and a greenhouse. A bandstand and a fountain were central features of the park, and all the seating was on the edges, along the streets. Since then, a play area, café, water feature and an amphitheatre have been constructed.

In detail, Grange Park originally had no parking facilities. Underground parking is now available with an entrance on the south east side. The fountain in the center of the park has been replaced by a square rose garden with benches on all four sides. In addition, on the west side, concerts can be performed in a large amphitheater with a seating area. That replaced a bandstand which had no seating. The only things remaining the same from 1920 are the two entrances and a rose garden in the northwest corner.