Hi, this is my essay for IELTS Writing Task 1. I would be grateful if I could get some feedback from teachers here. I also hope to know about the band of this task 1 writing. Thank you very much for reading my essay.

Task 1: The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the consumption of fuel-using and electric vehicles in the two countries and other in the period of 2006 and 2009. Overall, global hybrid sales tend to grow dramatically in this period that Japan and other countries have apparent increase while this vehicle's sales in the US fluctuate negligibly.

Between 2006 and 2008, the USA was the place where there were the biggest sales of hybrid vehicles rather than Japan and others. In 2006, Japan and other countries had a nearly similar number of sales, about more than 50,000 sales, while the US sales had more than 5 times. In 2007, the sales in the US was up to 350,000 sales while other countries and Japan were approximately 80,000 and 70,000 respectively. However, in 2008, the number of US sales decreased by about 40,000 sales when the two others were a small increase.

In the year of 2009, Japan was the biggest hybrid vehicle sales’ country with about 380,000 sales. In the US, the sales dropped off by 10,000 compared to the year before and the rest of the world had a modest growth. In addition, the total sales worldwide in 2009 increased two times more than that in 2006.

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