My topic: Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?


My essay:

The development of laptops and smartphones has led to a radical revolution in the way humans exchange information. Accordingly, teleconferences are gaining popularity in the business world. From my perspective, the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages.


On the positive side, people derive three major benefits from virtual meetings. First and foremost, that training activities and business discussion take place online affords employees flexibility in their timetable. For example, working mothers can finish work early in the afternoon to take care of their children and families and then participate in Internet-based meetings in the evening at home. Therefore, workers are able to achieve work-life balance and relieve stress, thus boosting their work productivity. Second, web conferences preclude geographical barriers. Obviously, they enable international corporations to stay in contact with their staff and clients in different locations over the world. In addition, on the outbreak of COVID 19, virtual conferencing appliances such as Zoom, Microsoft Team and Google Meet are the only solutions for all businesses to maintain their operations. Finally, online business discussions seem to be a more cost-efficient method. Obviously, if global conferences take place virtually, there is hardly any expenditure on hiring conference halls, accommodation and transportation. As a result, the electricity bill, printed documents as well as various equipment for carrying out meetings and training procedures are also economized.


On the negative side, Internet instability is the major obstacle of virtual conferences. The lagging connection disrupts the flow of information, hence reducing the participants' comprehension. Consequently, it negatively affects the work efficiency when putting theory into operation. Another shortcoming of online meetings is distraction. As being under no supervision from managers, irresponsible employees may not pay attention to the meetings, instead, they rather do household chores or read newspapers, thus failing to stay updated on the company's condition.


In conclusion, the demerits of online business meetings are still eclipsed by their merits. I think that corporations nowadays should incorporate two methods to create a flexible working environment for employees.

You wrote 330 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, pity the examiners who have to read all the IELTS essays individually. There are hundreds of them. If they read your long essay when they are tired at the end of the day, they will score extra hard and not be very generous when scoring.

Sixth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write 270-300 for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.
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You have 40 minutes.

The internet development of laptops and smartphones has led to a radical (Redundant. )revolution in the way we hold meeting, conferences and courses. humans (unnatural. We use "Human" in the context of biology and other animal species. It is unnatural as a substitute for "people".) exchange information. (off-topic. It is about having virtual meetings rather than face-to-face meetings.) Accordingly, teleconferences are gaining popularity in the business world. From my perspective, the advantages of this trend (wrong word. The topic did not mention any trend. The pronoun "this" is very natural by itself.) outweigh its disadvantages.


On the positive side, people derive three major benefits from virtual meetings. First and foremost, that training activities and business discussion (wrong form) take place online affords employees flexibility in planning their daily schedule. timetable. (wrong word. A timetable is for busses and trains.) For example, working mothers can finish work early in the afternoon to go home and take care of their children and families and then participate in Internet-based meetings in the evening at home. Therefore, workers They are able to achieve work-life balance and relieve stress, thus boosting their work productivity. Second, web conferences have no preclude geographical barriers. Obviously, they enable international corporations to stay in contact with their staff and clients in different locations all over the world. In addition, on during the outbreak of COVID 19 pandemic, virtual conferencing appliances (wrong word. An appliance is a dishwasher, clothes dryer, microwave oven or electric mixer.) such as Zoom, Microsoft Team and Google Meet are the only were effective solutions for all businesses to maintain their operations. Finally, online business discussions seem to be are more cost-effective than a face-to-face meeting. cost-efficient method. Obviously, if global conferences take place virtually, there is hardly any expenditure on hiring conference halls, accommodation and transportation. Besides, there are no printing costs for the electronic documents compared to paper handouts. As a result, (wrong transition) the electricity bill, printed documents as well as various equipment for carrying out meetings and training procedures are also economized.


On the negative side, Internet instability the unreliability of the internet in less-developed locations is the major obstacle for of virtual conferences. The lagging connection Intermittent disruptions and high latency connections disrupts the flow of information causes participants to drop offline, missing important parts of the conference. , hence reducing the participants' comprehension. Consequently, it negatively affects the work efficiency when putting theory into operation. (That does not make sense.) Another shortcoming of online meetings is distraction. As Being under no supervision from managers, irresponsible employees may not pay attention to the meetings, instead, they rather do household chores or read newspapers, thus failing to participate fully and attentively in the discussion. stay updated on the company's condition. (That does not make sense.)


In conclusion, the difficulties in conducting demerits (wrong word. "Demerit" is very rarely used. It is not a synonym of "disadvantages" ) . of online business meetings are still eclipsed by their merits. I think that corporations nowadays should incorporate two methods to create a flexible working environment for employees.

There are two major issues with your conclusion.

First, and most serious, you wrote an opinion that was the opposite of the one you gave in the introduction. You lose many points in task response if you change your opinion.

Second, the task did not ask for a recommendation. Do not give advice if it was not asked for. That is straying off-topic..

Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?

I do not understand your comment that in my conclusion, I wrote an opinion that opposite of the one I gave in the introduction.

INTRODUCTION: the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

CONCLUSION: the disadvantages are eclipsed by the advantages.

Can you explain it to me

I was wrong. I was thrown off by the poor word usage.


An examiner might have the same problem. They have to read a lot of essays, and don't spend a lot of time on each one. They are looking for clear communication.