topic: Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion,
answer:
It is widely believed that the shopping is easier today than ever before, due to the development of the internet and the advance of e-marketplace . While, other people argue the negative impact on this viewpoint. In my opinion, I agree with those who find the modern high-tech shopping today is more saving-time and convenient.
Undoubtedly, many of the older generation are slower to embrace changes. They find that personal service available in shop makes shopping an easier and more pleasant experience, whereas technology may be confusing and discourages real interaction. In addition, old ways of shopping continue to thrive because the vast majority of people still prefer to see and touch the goods which they buy. For instance, although technology provides images and videos of products for sale, many shopper prefer to try on the clothes or shoes or physically handle fruits or vegetable before choosing that makes them be responsible for their decision.
However, it is undeniable that advances in technology have improved shoppers' experience. In terms of the internet, the online shopping has recently grown in popularity and is in its infancy. Certainly, ordering goods online from the comfort of your own home saves time and effort. Those trips to stores sometime make shoppers catch in rush hour traffic jams. This all can be superseded by a click of a mouse. Even inside a supermarket, people can easily purchase their bills by smart cards as well as e-banking apps.
All in all, the advance of technology in shopping still remains some demerits, I would argue that it makes shopping easier and more pleasant.
It is widely believed that the shopping is easier today than ever before, due to many internet websites which are electronic marketplaces. development of the internet and the advance of e-marketplace . ("development of the internet" is seldom a useful phrase. It refers to protocols such as TCP/IP and the deployment of physical networks - cables and cellular phone towers. ) While, other people argue the negative impact on this viewpoint. (That is a fragment, not a sentence. Also, "other people" does not coordinate with the "dummy it" in "it is believed." "It is believed" means that most everyone has this view. Besides, "negative impact of this viewpoint" is not good English. . ) In my opinion, (The verb "agree" is an opinion. So the phrase "in my opinion" is redundant and repetitive.) I agree with those who find the modern high-tech shopping today is more saving-time and convenient.
Here is an example opening paragraph:
The internet, in particular the online shopping websites of Amazon, ebay and AliExpress, have make shopping extremely convenient and easy. But some people claim it is risky and people should buy in local stores. In my opinion, these risks are avoidable, and everyone should take advantage of these eCommerce sites.
Undoubtedly, many people, especially those of the older generation are slower to embrace changes. They find that the personal service available in shops makes shopping an easier and more pleasant experience, whereas using smartphones or computers technology (wrong word) may be confusing and discourages real interaction. In addition, old ways of shopping continue to thrive because the vast majority of people still prefer to see and touch the goods which they buy. For instance, although technology (wrong word) the online stores' websites provides images and videos of products for sale, many shopper prefer to try on the clothes or shoes or physically handle fruits or vegetable (wrong form) before choosing to buy them. It makes them confident in that makes them be responsible for their decision.
However, it is undeniable that (1) advances in technology have improved shoppers' experience. In terms of the internet, (1. Do not use "dummy-it" clauses. 2. "Advances in technology" is vague and not very good.) . the online shopping has recently grown in popularity over the past decade. Most large stores sell their merchandise both online and in their stores. and is in its infancy. Certainly, ordering goods online from the comfort of your own home saves time and effort. The lockdowns during the COVID pandemic accelerated the general acceptance of online purchases, since they did not have to go to crowded stores. Those trips to stores sometime sometimes make shoppers get caught catch in rush hour traffic jams. (The next is too informal. ANd after that, it is off-topic.) This all can be superseded by a click of a mouse. Even inside a supermarket, people can easily purchase their bills (We do not buy bills.) by smart cards as well as e-banking apps.
All in all, the advance of technology in shopping in stores is still attractive because of the personal attention and facilities to try on clothes and see the merchandise in person. still remains some demerits, (Forget the word "demerit." You will not use it correctly. It is very rare and old-fashioned. It is not a synonym for "disadvantage." Personally, I never use this word. ) However, I would argue that the internet it makes shopping easier and more pleasant.
