Topic:

Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

My essay:

Over the last few decades, there are a numerous public transportation, which can be used daily.Thus, it is firmly assumed that individual vehicles are the best method of transportation while a group of people argue that public transport service is better.Under scrutiny, I wholeheartedly agree that public transportation is superior since it has so many positive, and few negative aspects.

On the one hand, public transportation offer people plenty of benefits. The biggest advantage is that if most people use the public transportation system, it will ease the traffic flow.



It also leads to better air quality with fewer exhaust fumes from cars.Take the example of a bus. One bus can accommodate up to 40 passengers, and thus, replace 40 cars if each of these passengers decided to drive.So the volume of vehicles will be reduced on the roads. Furthermore, should public transportation be used more, money will be saved.Indeed, the money we spend on petrol can be cut down dramatically if we take a bus instead of using personal cars. Therefore, not only can use public transport, reduce environmental pollution but it saves money.

On the other hand, there are a number of disadvantages of using public transport that people should take into consideration. The serious drawback is that busses and trains are not as safe as private cars.In fact, a great number of criminal activities on buses or trains such as pickpockets. Another disadvantage of the use of public transportation is that our time can be wasted as we use the public transportation.Waiting for the bus or train is quite time-consuming and annoying for who get to their workplaces.Thus, individuals feel stressed the bus does not arrive on time and they will be late. Consequently, using private cars is one of the best ways to be protected from petty thieves as well as to save time.To sum up, advantageous as the public transport services are, it is certain that using private cars could bring about a variety of benefits. However, from my perspective, I do believe in the benefits of mass transit outweigh the drawbacks because if everyone used it, it would protect our environment.

Over the last few decades, public transportation is ever-increasing and popular in our world. It plays a vital role and an indispensable part of our life. It, on the contrary, is firmly assumed that individual vehicles are the best method of transportation while a group of people argue that public transport service should be used for this purpose. Under scrutiny, I wholeheartedly agree that public transportation is the main mean of transit. The essay will be analyzed the advantages and disadvantages of public transport services in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, public transportations offer people plenty of noteworthy positive effects. The biggest advantage is that the public transportation put to daily use may help ease the traffic flow. It also leads to the air better with the fewer exhaust fumes from cars. Take the example of bus. One bus can accommodate up to 40 passengers, thus, the volume of vehicles will be reduced on the roads. Furthermore, should public transportation be used more, more money will be saved. Indeed, the money we spend on petrol pumps can be cut down dramatically instead of using personal cars. Therefore, not only can using public transport reduce environmental pollutions but the money also is able to be reduced.

On the other hand, there are a number of disadvantages of using public transport that people should take into consideration. The serious drawback is that public transportations are not as safe as private cars. In fact, a great number of criminal activities on buses or trains such as pocket thieves, stealing the phone, etc. Another additional disadvantage of the use of public transportation is that our time can not be wasted unless we use the public transportation. On account of waiting for the bus or train, it is quite time-consuming and annoyed for who get to their workplaces or educational institutions. Thus, individuals feel stressed because the bus does not arrive and they will be late. Consequently, using private cars is one of the best ways to prevent us from several threats as well as save time.

To sum up, merits as the public transport services are,it is certain that using private cars could bring about a variety of benefits. However,from my perspective, I do believe in the merits of mass transit outweigh the demerits because it will protect our environment.

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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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Over the last few decades, public transportation is ever-increasing and popular in our world. It plays a vital role and an indispensable part of our life. It, on the contrary, is firmly assumed that individual vehicles are the best method of transportation while a group of people argue that public transport service should be used for this purpose. Under scrutiny, I wholeheartedly agree that public transportation is the main mean of transit. The essay will be analyzed the advantages and disadvantages of public transport services in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, public transportations offer people plenty of noteworthy positive effects. The biggest advantage is that the public transportation put to daily use may help ease the traffic flow. It also leads to the air better with the fewer exhaust fumes from cars. Take the example of bus. One bus can accommodate up to 40 passengers, thus, the volume of vehicles will be reduced on the roads. Furthermore, should public transportation be used more, more money will be saved. Indeed, the money we spend on petrol pumps can be cut down dramatically instead of using personal cars. Therefore, not only can using public transport reduce environmental pollutions but the money also is able to be reduced.

On the other hand, there are a number of disadvantages of using public transport that people should take into consideration. The serious drawback is that public transportations are not as safe as private cars. In fact, a great number of criminal activities on buses or trains such as pocket thieves, stealing the phone, etc. Another additional disadvantage of the use of public transportation is that our time can not be wasted unless we use the public transportation. On account of waiting for the bus or train, it is quite time-consuming and annoyed for who get to their workplaces or educational institutions. Thus, individuals feel stressed because the bus does not arrive and they will be late. Consequently, using private cars is one of the best ways to prevent us from several threats as well as save time.

To sum up, merits as the public transport services are,it is certain that using private cars could bring about a variety of benefits. However,from my perspective, I do believe in the merits of mass transit outweigh the demerits because it will protect our environment.

You wrote nearly 400 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

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Over the last few decades, public transportation is ever-increasing and popular in our world. It plays a vital role and an indispensable part of our life. (The increase of public transport was not in the task. It is not a very good opening sentence because it is not focused on the issue. Besides, you contradict yourself in the next sentence.) It, on the contrary, is firmly assumed that individual vehicles are the best method of transportation while a group of people argue that public transport service is better. should be used for this purpose. Under scrutiny, I wholeheartedly agree that public transportation is superior since it has so many positive, and few negative aspects. is the main (The question was which was better - not "main") mean (wrong word) of transit. The essay will be analyzed the advantages and disadvantages of public transport services in the following paragraphs.

(You already wrote a thesis statement. Delete the last sentence. It is unnecessary, and besides, it is not grammatical.

Do not paraphrase the prompt, paraphrase the general topic. Do not mention your essay.


(When you write an opinion essay, put the side you disagree with first. The view that you agree with has to come next. This makes the essay more cohesive and coherent because the conclusion follows the second body paragraph with your agreement.. )

On the one hand, public transportations (wrong form. transportation is non-count) offer people plenty of benefits. noteworthy positive effects. ("Offer effects" makes no sense.) The biggest advantage is that if most people use the public transportation system, it put to daily use may help will ease the traffic flow. It also leads to the air better air quality with the fewer exhaust fumes from cars. Take the example of a bus. One bus can accommodate up to 40 passengers, and thus, replace 40 cars if each of these passengers decided to drive. So the volume of vehicles will be reduced on the roads. Furthermore, should public transportation be used more, more money will be saved. Indeed, the money we spend on petrol pumps (We do not buy the pumps.) can be cut down dramatically if we take a bus instead of using personal cars. Therefore, not only can using public transport reduce environmental pollutions (wrong form. Pollution is non-count) but it saves money the money also is able to be reduced.

On the other hand, there are a number of disadvantages of using public transport that people should take into consideration. The serious drawback is that public transportations are busses and trains are not as safe as private cars. In fact, a great number of criminal activities on buses or trains such as pickpockets pocket thieves, stealing the phone, etc. (Do not use "..." or "etc." or phrases such as "and so on" in essays.) Another additional (Redundant. Use either "another disadvantage" or " An additional disadvantage.") disadvantage of the use of public transportation is that our time can not be wasted unless when we use the public transportation. (Your version means that people want to waste their time. ) On account of Waiting for the bus or train, it is quite time-consuming and annoyed (wrong form) for who get to their workplaces (ungrammatical - you cannot put a full clause after a preposition.) or educational institutions. Thus, individuals feel stressed because if the bus does not arrive on time and they will be late. Consequently, using private cars is one of the best ways to be protected from petty thieves prevent us from several threats as well as to save time.

To sum up, merits as the public transport services are, (ungrammatical. A merit is one thing and public transport is something else. They are not the same things.) it is certain that using private cars could bring about a variety of benefits. However, from my perspective, I do believe in the merits of mass transit outweigh the demerits (wrong word. "Demerit" is not the opposite of "merit") because it will if everyone used it, it would protect our environment.

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trimai1425Over the last few decades, there are a numerous public transportation, which can be used daily.

The time phrase "over the last few decades" makes no sense. Public transportation has existed for much longer than a hundred years, not tens of years.

"Public transportation" is non-count. We do not use the plural form. We do not count it, so "a" is incorrect.

Have you studied count nouns and non-count nouns?

trimai1425daily.Thus, it is firmly assumed t

Put a space after punctuation.

The second is a favorite memorized phrase of yours. I believe you have memorized it, but most of the time, it is not natural, and wrong.

If you say: It is firmly assumed / believed that X... This means that all people agree and nobody disagrees.

If you then write:

trimai1425while a group of people argue

you are writing the opposite of what you just said.

For example These two sentences are opposite. They are not logical.

All people believe that black cats bring very bad luck.
Hue got a black cat because she wants some very good luck.

Your writing is not consistent. It is not logical.

trimai1425I wholeheartedly agree that public transportation is superior since it has so many positive, and few negative aspects.

You did not answer the essay prompt.

Here is the essay prompt:

trimai1425what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

The question is not "Do you agree?" The question is not "To what extent do you agree?"

You must read the instructions.
You must understand them.

Otherwise, you write the wrong essay.