Topic: The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years


My essay:

The line graph compares three organisations in terms of their waste output by tonnes through a 15-year period, since 2000.

Apparently, there were considerable changes produced by three businesses indicated on the chart. While organisation A and B saw the same trend which is the reduction in waste released between 2000 and 2015, company C’s amount increased significantly.

In 2000, company A produced the highest quantity of waste over the entire period by 12 tonnes, while business B and C released roughly 8 tonnes and 4 tonnes of waste material respectively. The following 5 years later, whilst the amounts of waste production made by organisation B and C grew by approximately 2 tonnes, the figure for company A fell by around 1 tonne.

From 2005 to 2010, company A cut waste production by almost 1 tonne, and the figure of waste that business B declined as three times as business A’s waste material decreased. By contrast, organisation C presented a boost in waste output of roughly a tonne. By 2015, while company C’s waste had grown to 10 tonnes, the respective amounts of waste from company A and B had dropped to 8 tonnes and only 3 tonnes.

The line graph compares three organisations [ 1] companies in terms of their waste output by in tonnes [ 2] through a 15-year period, since from 2000 to 2015.

[ 3] Apparently, [ 4] there were considerable changes produced by three businesses indicated on the chart. Overall, while organisation companies A and B saw the same trend which is the a reduction in waste released over those years, between 2000 and 2015, company C’s amount waste increased significantly.

In 2000, company A produced 12 tonnes, the highest quantity of waste over in the entire period, [ 5] by 12 tonnes, while business B and C released roughly 8 tonnes and 4 tonnes of waste material respectively. Over the following 5 years, [ 6] later, [ 7] whilst while the amounts of waste production made produced by organisation B and C grew by approximately 2 tonnes, the figure for company A fell by around 1 tonne.

From 2005 to 2010, company A cut waste production by almost 1 tonne, and the figure of waste that business for B declined too. [ 8] as three times as business A’s waste material decreased. By contrast, organisation company Cs presented a boost in waste output continued rising, with its graph intersecting company B’s at approximately 7 tonnes in 2010. of roughly a tonne. By 2015, while company C’s waste had grown to 10 tonnes, the respective amounts of waste from company A and B had dropped to 8 tonnes and only 3 tonnes.

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[ 1]: Be consistent. Use either “company” or “organization” throughout your text.

[ 2]: This is a summary task. Do not complicate your phrasing unnecessarily. You risk making mistakes if you do. For instance, “since 2000” means up to and including the present date!

[ 3]: “Apparently” means you are not 100% sure.

[ 4]: That is not saying anything useful.

[ 5]: That means it was 12 tonnes more than any other figure.

[ 6]: “following” means later!

[ 7]: “whilst” is too formal/literary. Use “while” or “whereas” instead.

[ 8]: That structure does not exist in English!