Question:
The table below gives information about UK independent films.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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My essay:
The given table represents the ten different genres of independent films shown in the United Kingdom and Republic of Ireland in 2012.
Overall, the largest numbers of releases were comedy, horror, drama, documentary and thriller, whereas the remaining types are the least. Also, the percentages for dramma and documenatary were much higher than other kinds, standing at the same level. In contrast, drama represented the highest proportion compared to the nine other ones.
Drama and documentary each were 35 releases, being the first out of ten types of independent movies. Similarly, both were 23,6 percent of all releases. Meanwhile, while the former represented 8,3 percent, the latter was 2,9 percent in income from selling tickets.
The table saw the smallest number of releases, being merely 1 person, which had 0,7 percent of the total, and nearly one tenth in income from ticket sales. 8 releases are of other kinds of films, 5,4 percent of all releases and 3,2 percent of money from selling tickets.
The given (Do not use "given" or "provided" or similar past participles. Unnatural.) table represents (wrong verb. There is data about these films; there is no representation of them) the ten different genres of independent films shown in the United Kingdom and Republic of Ireland in 2012. (Very inadequate first paragraph. You did not describe this table accurately.)
This is a good opening paragraph. It provides the entire basis for coherence and cohesion in the essay.
The table lists nine named independent film genres. Along with the category name is the number of films which first opened in the UK and Ireland in 2012 and the percentage of total income received from sales of tickets. Films that did not fall in one of the named categories are grouped into "other".
Overall, the largest numbers of releases were comedy, horror, drama, documentary and thriller, whereas the remaining types are the least. (That has no information. It is not a main feature.) Also, the percentages for dramma and documenatary (Copy the names correctly.) were much higher than other kinds, standing at the same level. (not a good phrase) In contrast, drama represented the highest proportion (repetitive. You just wrote about dramatic films.) compared to the other nine other ones.
Drama and documentary each were 35 releases, or 23.6% of the total. being the first out of ten types of independent movies. (Repetitive. You already wrote that. Do not repeat information. Besides, there are nine, not ten types. The last one is a catch-all category for films that did not fit into one of the nine named genres. You often will see such an unnamed category. ) Similarly, both were 23,6 percent of all releases. (That is not important information. If the numbers are equal, the percentages are also equal.) Meanwhile, while the former (Do not use "former" and "latter" It is very bad for coherence and cohesion because the reader has to glance backwards to find the reference. ) represented 8,3 percent, the latter was 2,9 percent in income from selling tickets. (Bad coherence and cohesion. You never mentioned ticket sales before.)
The table saw (Do tables have eyes? Can they see things? This is very bad.) the smallest number of releases, being merely 1 person, (wrong reporting. There are no people in the table.) which had 0,7 percent of the total, and nearly one tenth in income from ticket sales. 8 (Never begin a sentence with a digit.) releases are of other kinds of films, 5,4 percent of all releases and 3,2 percent of money from selling tickets.
Sample essay:
The table lists nine named independent film genres. Along with the category name is the number of films which first opened in the UK and Ireland in 2012 and the percentage of total income received from sales of tickets. Films that did not fall in one of the named categories are grouped into "other".
Overall, there were 148 releases. The most common genres were Drama and Documentaries and the least common were Biopic, Action and Romance. However, being common did not mean that they had the highest income per film; it was the opposite.
In detail, Drama and Documentaries each had 35 films, followed by Comedies at 26. Horror and Thrillers were fourth and fifth, at 14 and 13, respectively, so these five categories came to more than 80% of the total. The top producer of income was from Comedies, at nearly half the total. Another genre with relatively high income, was Horror, which produced a fifth. Dramas and Documentaries were quite unprofitable; together they accounted for 47% of the releases and only 11% of income. That was only slightly higher than Biopic films, which had only a single release, but 9.1% of the income.
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