Prompt: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is thought that scientists, researchers, academics should make their research works in public to a feasible extent. In my opinion, while I agree with this, I also believe that these data need checking carefully before being available.
On the one hand, there are two main reasons why I think sharing scientific studies, business and academic information is appreciated. First, it brings many benefits not only for society but also for individuals. For instance, if new research and inventions are regularly shared, updated and taught in universities as well as colleges, it will enable students to put their knowledge revenue to spend in the key field, including education, environment, and health care, which leads to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. Second, if contributing research works for the public, the sharers are able to gain a reputation and attract more funds for their projects.
On the other hand, there have several extremely virtual data which should not open to all people. It is clear that sensitive information like the method of making nuclear bomb needs being restricted. If not, it will make global disasters. Another example is that if too many information about customs, market research, the business strategy of a company is public, it will make huge damage to the profits of this company.
In conclusion, communication should be accessible to scientific research, business and academic ones in a suitable way.

It is thought that scientists, researchers, academics should make their research works (wrong expression) in public That's not quite the topic. It is about sharing research between peer groups, other researchers in their field.) to a feasible extent. In my opinion, while I agree with this, I also believe that these data (wrong word. Data is different than the real research work. This is slightly off-topic.) need checking carefully before being (missing word) available.


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On the one hand, there are two main reasons why I think sharing scientific studies, business and academic information is appreciated. (beneficial) First, it brings many benefits not only for society but also for individuals. For instance, if new research and inventions are regularly shared, updated and taught in universities as well as colleges, it will enable students to put their knowledge revenue to spend in the key field, (poor English) including education, environment, and health care, which leads to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. Second, if contributing research works for the public, the sharers researchers are able to gain a reputation and attract more funds for their projects.


On the other hand, there have several extremely virtual data (data is non-count. several data is wrong. You can say several types / kinds of information / data or some data ) which should not open to all people. It is clear that Sensitive information like the method of making nuclear bombs needs being restricted. If not, it will make (wrong word - cause, result in, create a risk for) global disasters. Another example is that if too many information (wrong usage. information is non-count) about customs, market research, the business strategy of a company is public, it will make huge (too informal) damage to the profits of this company.


In conclusion, communication should be accessible to scientific research, business and academic ones in a suitable way.

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It is thought that scientists, researchers, academics should share their studies to a feasible extent. In my opinion, while I agree with this, I also believe that this knowledge needs checking carefully before becoming available materials.


On the one hand, there are two main reasons why I think sharing scientific studies, business, and academic information is beneficial. First, not only society but individuals also gain benefit from it. For instance, if new research and inventions are regularly updated and taught in universities as well as colleges, it will enable students to put their knowledge gained into practice. From that, they can choose high-paying jobs and pay more taxes. As a result, the government may have more revenue to spend in the key fields, including education, environment, and health care, which leads to to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. Second, if contributing research works for the public, the researchers are able to gain a reputation and attract more funds for their projects.


On the other hand, there are several kinds of information that are too virtual to open to all people. In fact, sensitive information like the method of making nuclear bomb needs restricting not to cause global disasters. Another example is that companies will be damaged in term of finance if their information about customs, market researches, business strategies are revealed.


In conclusion, scientific research, business and academic one should be accessible in a suitable way.

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It is thought that scientists, researchers, academics should share their studies to a feasible extent. In my opinion, while I agree with this, I also believe that this knowledge (Knowledge is a sum total of what we know to be true. "I have a good knowledge of maths"means that I know arithmetic, algebra, trigonometry, calculus, set theory, statistics, and differential equations. How do you check knowledge?) needs to be checked checking carefully before becoming available materials.


On the one hand, there are two main reasons why I think sharing scientific studies, business, and academic information is beneficial. First, not only society but individuals also gain benefit from it. For instance, if the results of new research and inventions are used to update existing course material regularly updated and taught in universities as well as colleges, it will enable students to put their knowledge gained into practice. From that, they can get choose high-paying jobs and pay more taxes. As a result, the government may have more revenue to spend in the key fields, including education, environment, and health care, which leads to to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. Second, if contributing research provides medical treatments or technology works for the public, the researchers are able to gain a reputation and attract more funds for their projects.


On the other hand, there are several kinds of information that are too sensitive to be shared with virtual to open to all people. In fact, sensitive information like the method of making nuclear bomb needs to be restricted so as restricting not to cause global disasters. Another example is that companies will be damaged in terms of finance if their information about customs, their proprietary technology, trade secrets, market researches, and business strategies are revealed.


In conclusion, scientific research, business and academic one should be made accessible, but in a suitable way.

Thanks for helping me quickly!

And I have questions: What is the difference between need+ving and need+to be+past participle?

For example: My phone needs repairing vs My phone needs to be repair.

And why I can't use need+ving in the essay above?

https://www.englishpage.com/gerunds/gerund_or_infinitive_different_list.htm

http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/flatmates/episode121/languagepoint.shtml
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I think you mean "valuable" (important) when you use "virtual."

I posted two links about the difference between need + gerund versus need + infinitive. I hope they work.

ngọc ngọc My phone needs to be repaired.

The infinitive expresses a need is for an action in the future. In this case, a repair.


The -ing form is used in certain fixed expressions. It is less formal.
Also, it expresses one particular need at this moment, not a general rule for the future.

This needs fixing. [ok] It's broken now.


A modifier is rare in this construction.

This needs fixing immediately. Emotion: no

This needs to be fixed immediately. Emotion: yes Emotion: yes.


The bike needs to be taken to the mechanic. Emotion: yes Emotion: yes.
The bike needs taking to the mechanic. Emotion: no Emotion: no Emotion: no

General rule:

All bags need to be checked before you board a plane. (A general rule)

ngọc ngọcAnd why I can't use need+ving in the essay above?

It is either an unnatural usage or too informal for an academic essay.