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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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Sharing excess information in business, scientific research, and education is controversial due to potential leaks of some important ones. While there are some benefits to maintaining a constant stream of information in either field, I believe it had better be restricted.

On the one hand, an excess share of information can provide people with trading opportunities and educational news. Given the ever-shifting world full of risks of the economy, stockbrokers can buy in or sell out shares at the appropriate times by analyzing information flowing freely in the stock market, saving them from financial loss. Besides, the copious informative provision in academic works would benefit people with scientific explanations, explaining hundreds of superstitious phenomena. For example, the findings of magma currents always moving under the Earth’s crust would shed light on the mind-boggling sound of boreholes that, because of endless drilling, believed was originated from hell. The generous share of information, therefore, helps people avoid going bankrupt and having false beliefs.

On the other hand, the revelation of information belonging to sealed data should not be encouraged. I perceive hazardous formulas formed in scientific research as the most sensitive ones that would cause irreversible consequences once revealed. In case the nuclear bomb-making formula is widely known by various nations, WWIII might be heralding. Likewise, publicizing the company’s strategies in the competitive environment would cause it a series of intolerable losses. Henceforth, limiting the amount of information shared is vital because the results of leaks are usually detrimental.

All in all, I can understand why people might want the share of information with excesses in business, research, and education areas, but it seems to me that restrictions on informative publicity are much more desirable for the sealing assurance of secret ones.

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Sharing excess (wrong word.) information in business, scientific research, and education is controversial due to potential leaks (That makes no sense. If information is shared, there is no need for a "leak". "Leak" means that the data was stolen, not shared.) of some important ones. (wrong word. There is not one information or a hundred "informations" because "information" is not countable.) That sentence makes no sense. It is not controversial. It is about judging how much information to share freely with others.) While there are some benefits to maintaining a constant stream of information in either field, I believe it had better be restricted.

On the one hand, an excess share announcements of corporate information can provide people with trading opportunities and educational news about business dealings.. Given the ever-shifting world full of risks of the economy, investors stockbrokers can buy in or sell out shares at the appropriate times by analyzing information flowing freely in the stock market, saving them from financial loss. Besides, publication of academic research results the copious informative provision in academic works (unnatural_) would benefit people with scientific explanations, explaining the nature and causes of hundreds of superstitious phenomena. For example, the findings meaurements of magma currents always moving under the Earth’s crust would shed light on the causes of volcanos and earthquakes which was mind-boggling sound of boreholes that, because of endless drilling, believed was to have originated from evil demons. hell. The generous sharing share of information, therefore, helps people avoid going bankrupt and having false beliefs.

On the other hand, the revelation of sensitive information belonging to sealed data should not be encouraged. I perceive Hazardous formulas for poisons and toxins discovered formed in scientific research as the most sensitive ones that would cause irreversible consequences once revealed. In case the If the process for making nuclear weapons were to be widely disseminated, nuclear bomb-making formula is widely known by various nations, WWIII might be instigated. heralding. Likewise, publicizing the company’s strategies in the current competitive environment would cause it a series of intolerable losses. Henceforth, limiting the amount of information shared is vital because the results of exposing very sensitive data is leaks are usually detrimental.

All in all, I can understand why people might want the liberal sharing share of information with excesses in business, research, and education areas, but it seems to me that restrictions on this informative publicity are absolutely vital to avoid catastrophic consequences. much more desirable for the sealing assurance of secret ones.

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I am grateful for all amendments you made to my essay. They do help me know what appropriate words to use to express my idea. Thank you!