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The novel coronavirus has caused the death of more than one million people across the world. All countries have imposed lockdown in varying limits to prevent the spread of the infection. All means of public transport within and outside the countries have been suspended. Social network sites have been playing a pivotal role during the lockdown.

Apart from helping us to remain in contact with our friends and relations, social network sites such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram are efficiently used by people to create awareness about COVID 19. Philanthropists and community workers are using these sites to connect with their counterparts in different parts of the world to help the poor and those living in remote regions. In the last six months there have been many instances of medical and government aid reaching the affected people after their conditions got widely shared in social network sites. These sites have also led to innocent people suffering in the hands of cyber bullies. In some instances, people see the information regarding their family and financial status they share with their online “friends” only to be misused.

In conclusion, though there are certain drawbacks related social network sites, they are highly helpful during emergency situations such as natural disasters or pandemics.

It is October 2020. The novel coronavirus has already caused the death of more than one million people across the world. All countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees limits to prevent the spread of the infection and All means of public transport within and outside the countries have been suspended. Social network sites have been playing a pivotal role during the lockdown.

Apart from helping us to remain in contact with our friends and relations, social network sites such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram are efficiently used by people to create raise awareness about COVID 19. Philanthropists and community workers are using these sites to connect with their counterparts in different parts of the world to help the poor and those living in remote regions. In the last six months there have been many instances of medical and government aid reaching the affected people after their conditions were described on these got widely shared in social network sites.

(When you change the topic, you need to start a new paragraph. Your argument does not follow from your thesis statement. "How social networks help people endure the conditions of a global pandemic.. The coherence and cohesion is not good.)

These sites have also led to innocent people suffering in the hands of cyber bullies. In some instances, people see the information regarding their family and financial status they share with their online “friends” only to be misused.

In conclusion, though there are certain drawbacks related social network sites, they are highly helpful during emergency situations such as natural disasters or pandemics.

Thank you very much.

AlpheccaStarsIt is October 2020. The novel coronavirus has already cause

Got it.

AlpheccaStarsAll countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees to prevent the spread of the infection and public transport suspended.

Here, I am unable to understand the grammar in the underlined segment.

"[A]nd public transport has been suspended"

This sounds all right.

But, I know your version must be definitely correct. Please give your views.

AlpheccaStars(When you change the topic, you need to start a new paragraph. Your argument does not follow from your thesis statement. "How social networks help people endure the conditions of a global pandemic.. The coherence and cohesion is not good.)

I understand. I will be careful about this.


Thank you once again.

Suresh

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vsureshAll countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees to prevent the spread of the infection and public transport suspended.

My bad.

I made too many corrections and did not adequately review the final.

All countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees to prevent the spread of the infection and suspended public transport.

Actually, the suspension of transportation is an element of lockdown, so you can use it as an example.

All countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees, for example, the suspension of all public transportation, to prevent the spread of the infection.

AlpheccaStarsActually, the suspension of transportation is an element of lockdown, so you can use it as an example. All countries have imposed lockdown in varying degrees, for example, the suspension of all public transportation, to prevent the spread of the infection.

Got it. Thank you, AlpheccaStars.