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Please review my IELTS Task 2 Essay

Some people believe that community work such as working for charity, taking part in cleanliness campaigns or teaching poor children in the neighborhood should be made mandatory for high school students, aged between 15 and 18 years.

Do you agree or disagree?

Community work is primarily meant for ameliorating the quality of life of the people of a community in one way or other. So, when we involve ourselves in it, we derive a deep sense of satisfaction. Further, participation in community work enables us to develop some of the most important life skills. So, I strongly feel that community work should be made mandatory for high school students.

First, when students take part in community work they get an opportunity to appreciate that life of some people is not as easy or comfortable as theirs. This, in turn, enables them value the things they have blessed with much more than they had done before. For example, when students participate in a teaching program for children who have discontinued schooling due to poverty, they feel grateful to their parents for having provided them with not only basic necessities but also things that make their lives comfortable and enjoyable.

Secondly, community work helps students develop certain important life skills. As students plan and implement a community welfare program, they delegate each other a set of duties and responsibilities. This directly or indirectly helps them develop their skills of leadership, organization and decision making. A community work program that aims at identifying the families that discourage schooling for girl children, and sensitizing the parents about the importance of formal education to girls requires deft planning and effective communication skills. When students get to participate in such a program they are able to improve their communication and leadership skills significantly.

Considering the ideas contained in the above paragraphs I conclude that students will be highly benefitted if they are made to take part in community work.

Community work is primarily meant for ameliorating the quality of life of the people of a community in one way or other. So, when we get involved involve ourselves in it, we derive a deep sense of satisfaction. Further, participation in community work enables us to develop some of the most important life skills. So, I strongly feel agree / concur that community work should be made mandatory for high school students.

First, when students take part in community work they get an opportunity to appreciate that life for of some people is not as easy or comfortable as theirs. This, in turn, enables them value the things they have blessed with much more than they had done before. For example, when students participate in a teaching program for children who have had to drop out of school discontinued schooling due to poverty, they feel grateful to their parents for having provided them with not only basic necessities but also things that make their lives comfortable and enjoyable.

Secondly, community work helps students develop certain important life skills. As students plan and implement a community welfare project program, they delegate each other a set of duties and responsibilities. This directly or indirectly helps them develop their skills of leadership, organization, goal-setting and decision making. For example, a community work program that aims at identifying the families that discourage schooling for girls children, and sensitizing the parents about the importance of formal education for their daughters to girls requires deft planning and effective communication skills. When students get to participate in such a program they are able to improve their communication and leadership skills significantly.

Considering the ideas contained in the above paragraphs (Summarize your arguments. Do not refer to your body paragraphs.) In conclusion, I conclude I am convinced that students will be highly benefitted if they are made to take part in community work. They will appreciate their relative wealth, learn about the problems in their community and make a difference, along with honing their soft skills.

Thank you very much, AlpheccaStars.

I have a few question.

Please give your views.

1. Could you help me understand the difference between "get involved" and "involve ourselves"?

2. "...work they get an opportunity to appreciate that life for of some people is not as easy or comfortable as theirs."

Here, I too feel sounds correct or more correct but am able to understand why of is not all right.


You have made an important change in the conclusion.

I am able to understand you change you have meant.


Thank you once for your time and effort.


Suresh

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vsuresh1. Could you help me understand the difference between "get involved" and "involve ourselves"?

Get involved is far more common.

vsureshHere, I too feel sounds correct or more correct but am able to understand why of is not all right.

Again, "for" is the more natural of the two prepositions.

vsureshI am able to understand you the change you have made. meant.

There are a few principles for writing task 2.

1. A sound overall approach.

2. Good paragraphing.

3. A pleasing introduction.

I have collected these over the years!



AlpheccaStarsvsureshI am able to understand you the change you have made. meant.

My bad. I am sorry.

AlpheccaStarsI have collected these over the years!

Thank you very much. I will go through them.

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