Please review my writing task 1. Thank you so much!

topic: the graph gives the information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 to 2030.


My essay:

The graph illustrates the percentage of households car ownership of three different groups (no car, one car, two or more cars) in Britain over the course of 40 years starting in 1990.

It is obvious that while the number of households who own one car and two or more cars increased, despite fluctuation, the figure for no car declined substantially. The proportion of two or more cars ownership experienced a significant growth.

In 1990, more than 50% of British households did not possess a car while one car and two or more cars ownership accounted for approximately 12% and 35% respectively. For the next 15 years, the proportion of British with no car fell dramatically to over 35%. By contrast, the figure for one car reached a peak at over 55% in 2005 after fluctuating around 40%. Meanwhile, the figure for two or more cars fluctuated around 10%.

The number of no car households dropped to about 30% in 2010 and remained stable until 2020. Over the same period, the figure for one car saw a downward trend of more than 15% while the opposite was true for more cars which grew to over 25%. Between 2020 and 2030, the percentage of one car ownership is expected to increase to about 42% in 2030 after dropping to well under 40% in 2025 while the expectation for two or more cars is to keep growing to nearly 42% in 2030. The estimation for that number of no car households is to drop by 15% in 2030.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. You still make the same mistakes.

IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

You wrote over 250 words, while the minimum is 150.

A task 1 essay should be 160-190 words.


You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for these errors.

Second, especially in Task 2, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. In Task 1, you are likely writing about everything, rather than following the instructions and picking out only the significant points. This will cost you points.

Third, you will take a lot of the limited time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.

Fourth, you will not have enough time to devote to Task 2, and get a lower score there. Task 2 counts twice as much for your overall score.

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You have used inappropriate vocabulary words that you can read about in my advice: illustrate, experience, fluctuate, see, and figure. Numbers cannot see things. They cannot have experiences!

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The graph (What kind of graph?) illustrates (read my advice) the percentage of households car ownership (awkward) of three different groups (no car, one car, and two or more cars) in Britain over the course of 40 years starting in 1990.

It is obvious that while (read my advice) the number of households who own one car and two or more cars increased, (You cannot use the past tense for something in the future. 2030 is future.) despite fluctuation, (read my advice) the figure (read my advice) for no car declined substantially. The proportion of two or more cars ownership experienced (read my advice) a significant growth.

In 1990, more than 50% of British households did not possess a car while one car and two or more cars ownership accounted for approximately 12% and 35% respectively. For the next 15 years, the proportion of British with no car fell dramatically to over 35%. (45% is over 35% and so is 50% or 38%) By contrast, the figure (read my advice) for one car reached a peak at over 55% (80% is over 55% and so is 62%) in 2005 after fluctuating (read my advice) around 40%. Meanwhile, the figure (read my advice) for two or more cars fluctuated (read my advice) around 10%.

(Do not start a new paragraph. The topic has not changed.)

The number of no car households dropped to about 30% in 2010 and remained stable (not a good word) the same / constant until 2020. Over the same period, the figure for one car saw a downward trend of more than 15% while the opposite was true for more cars which grew to over 25%. Between 2020 and 2030, the percentage of one car ownership is expected to increase to about 42% in 2030 after dropping to well under 40% in 2025 while the expectation for two or more cars is to keep growing to nearly 42% in 2030. The estimation for that number of no car households is to drop by 15% in 2030.