The table shows the export values of various products in 1997 and 2010.
The table plots the turnover of different commodities between 1997 and 2010.
Overall, the period witnessed increases in the revenues of equipment, telecommunication, and metals, except for clothing and manufacturing. Metals products had the most significant change in the export value over the 3-year period.
In 1997, the profit of equipment was largest with 10.3 billion, followed by telecommunication with 7.9 billion. Over the following 13 years, dramatic rises were seen in these figures but the turnover of telecommunication surpassed equipment (11.6 billion) to become the dominant value. Meanwhile, metal export values achieved 5.1 billion in 2010, doubling the data compared to the year 1997.
At the beginning of the period, clothing and manufacturing products made nearly 12 billion and both figures depicted downward trends with the former standing at 5 billion and the latter reaching 4 billion at the end of the period. Besides, the overall export values increased moderately by 20% over the same period.
The table plots (wrong word. "Plot" means to put on a graph or chart. Plot is NOT for tables.) the turnover (wrong word.) of different commodities (wrong word. Commodities are bulk goods sold on the "Commodities exchange." There is only one commodity in the table. How many? What are they? What are the units of measure?)between 1997 and 2010.
Overall, the period witnessed (wrong word. Periods have no eyes. They cannot witness or see anything.) increases in the revenues (wrong word.) of equipment, telecommunication, and metals, except for clothing and manufacturing. Metals products had the most significant change in the export value over the 3-year period. (wrong reporting. Three years is 1997-2000. Are there values listed for 2000?)
In 1997, the profit of equipment (wrong expression. There are no profits listed.) . was largest with 10.3 billion, followed by telecommunication with 7.9 billion. Over the following 13 years, dramatic rises were seen in these figures (wrong word.) but the turnover (wrong word.) of telecommunication surpassed equipment (11.6 billion) to become the dominant Not a good word choice - unnatural) value. Meanwhile, metal export values achieved 5.1 billion in 2010, doubling the data (wrong word. - Data is the set of all the values in the figure.) compared to the year 1997.
The numbers in the picture below can see, witness and experience things.
But are these human-action verbs appropriate for a report to a university math professor, or are they only used in a primary school lesson to teach young children how to count in a fun way? It is the same case for time periods. They cannot see, or witness or experience anything. The professor reading your report would not be pleased!
Vocabulary: commodity
What Is a Commodity Market?
A commodity market is a marketplace for buying, selling, and trading raw materials or primary products.
Commodities are often split into two broad categories: hard and soft commodities. Hard commodities include natural resources that must be mined or extracted—such as gold, rubber, and oil, whereas soft commodities are agricultural products or livestock—such as corn, wheat, coffee, sugar, soybeans, and pork.
This is a very poor task 1. There is no such word as "telecommunity" and "manufacturing" is a process, not something that can be exported.
If "telecommunity" is corrected, there is a conflict with the first item, "equipment," so that needs to be changed.
Do not use these very bad and incorrect figures for your practice!!! They are defective and flawed, and are not good for you to learn from.
I can say enough “thank you” to you, you have helped a lot. Could you give me a sample for this esaay. I really like the way you choose important features.
oh, I apologised for that. That was my fault. I did not know this task is flawed. 😥
donbang shinkioh, I apologised for that. That was my fault. I did not know this task is flawed. 😥
No apology. The people who should apologize to you are the ones who created this exercise. They do not deserve to be called "English teachers" because they do not know much English...
donbang shinkiI can say enough “thank you” to you, you have helped a lot. Could you give me a sample for this esaay. I really like the way you choose important features.
The first thing to understand is "export value." It is not profits. It is not earnings. It is not revenue. It is the monetary value of the items that were exported at that time.
For example, clothing had an export value of $6 billion Hong Kong dollars in 1997.
The clothing was shipped to the UK, France, India and the US. The importer had to pay a tariff (import duty or tax) on the export value. It does not mean that the clothing was sold at that value. Usually stores have a mark-up so they can pay their employees and make a profit. A T-shirt with an original export value of $4 might be sold new for $7. If the retail store bought too many T-shirts, they mark them down so that someone will buy them, so maybe the sales price was $5.
Since this is a precise definition, there is no synonym that can be used.
Sample essay:
Note that I define an abbreviation for the units of measure to reduce repetition and word count.
Outline:
Paragraph #1: Describe the contents of the table, but no actual data values.
Paragraph #2: Report two or three main features.
Paragraph #3: Focus on comparisons: the two years, the relative ranking. Group the two equipment categories together.
The table lists the value (in billions of Hong Kong dollars, $HKb) of five different types of products (industrial equipment, telecommunications equipment, manufactured goods, clothing, and metals) exported in 1997 and 2010.
Overall, the export value is concentrated in the two top categories, industrial and telecommunications, in both years. Despite the declines in manufactured goods and clothing, total export value went up with the largest percentage being in metals.
In detail, equipment (industrial plus telecommunications) amounted to 56% of the total (32 $HKb) in 1997 and 63% of 2010's total, 38.4 $HKb. Industrial equipment was highest, at 10.3 $HKb in 1997, but slipped to second place, 11.6 $HKb in 2010. Second place telecommunications equipment, at 7.9 $HKb in 1997 was highest in 2010, 12.7 $HKb. Both clothing and manufactured goods declined, from 6 to 5 $HKb, and 5.5 to 4 $HKb, respectively. Metals represented the smallest value, only 7% of the total in 1997, but its increase of 122% put it in third place, at about 13% in 2010.