Please review my writing task 2. Thank you so much!

Topic: why is the circus still a popular form of entertainment in the modern electronic age?

support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge.

My essay:

Nowadays, with the explosive growth of technology such as TV, smartphones, the internet, etc. We have a thousand ways to entertain ourselves. But I believe that one of the most well-known types of entertainment is the circus because of some following reasons.


First, it fascinates people with unique performances. People are always curious, especially children, they want to see something special so they enjoy going to the circus. Circuses have a variety of interesting acts which include acrobats, clowns, parades of trained animals, and sometimes exotic animals from different places or countries. For example, people love watching perfect maneuvers of acrobats from a rope high up in the air and trained animals perform unbelievable movements following their trainers. Differ from many shows on smartphones or TV, everything in the circus is live and people can see it with their own eyes.


Second, circuses are suitable for people of all ages from children to adults. Children are keen on going to the circus because their curiosity pushes them to explore new things. For adults, they can relax and relieve their stress from work by enjoying some comedy acts of clowns. So all people from a family can go to a circus and share their good time with others.


In conclusion, I think in the near future people still enjoy going to circuses for entertainment and circuses remain famous for their unique acts and suitability for all ages.

Nowadays, with the explosive growth of electronics and information technology technology such as TVs, smartphones, home computers and the internet, etc. (do not use "...", "etc." or phases such as "and so on" in formal writing.) We (wrong punctuation) have a thousand ways to entertain ourselves. But I believe that one of the most well-known types of entertainment is the circus. (You did not respond correctly to "popular" - well-known is not the same as popular.) because of some following reasons.


First, it the circus fascinates people with unique performances. People, especially children, are always curious, especially children, (wrong word order) (comma splice error) they want to see something special so they enjoy going to the circus. Circuses have a variety of interesting acts which include acrobats, clowns, parades of trained animals, and sometimes exotic animals from different places or countries. For example, people love watching perfect maneuvers of acrobats from a rope high up in the air and trained animals perform unbelievable tricks movements following their trainers. Differ (Wrong word - differ is a verb.) from many shows on smartphones or TV, everything in the circus is live and people can see it with their own eyes.


Second, circuses are suitable for people of all ages from children to adults. Children are keen on going to the circus because their curiosity pushes them to explore new things. For Adults, they can relax and relieve their stress from work by enjoying some the comic comedy acts of clowns. So all people from a family can go to a circus and share their good time with others.


In conclusion, I think in the near future people still enjoy going to circuses for entertainment and circuses will remain famous for their unique acts and suitability for all ages.