Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day.
The two plans illustrate the map of a health centre in the year 2005 and also the present day of the same place after the changes are made.
Overall, the size of the building a long time ago was smaller than now, this reduced the garden size as an impact for the extended building.
Firstly, in 2005, this centre has 12 spaces car parking. on entering this centre, on the first left there was a door to the CR3 room and adjacent to this room was an office. Similarly, on the right side, the first door was led to CR1 room and besides this room there was a CR2 room. there were already two rows of chairs along the corridor and at the end of the hallway was the reception desk. Furthermore, on the backside of the reception desk and CR2 room there was a physiotherapy room. Finally, at the backside of the building there is a big garden area.
On the other hand, after renovation, the centre has many new rooms like the car parking spaces has been increased to 30. However, the entrance is shifted to the south-west region and after entering the building there is a children's play area on the right side and the reception desk on the left side. Moreover, adjacent to the reception there is an office and next to this is the minor operations room, without any changes to the position of physiotherapy room. Furthermore, the rooms CR1, CR2, CR3 and CR4 are adjacent to each other. Finally, the seating has been arranged on the outside of the rooms in the building
P/s: Sometimes I do not know where to start. I really want to write a map description essay with the highest score of Coherence but I often stray off the course, and therefore write something not logical and well-organised. I hope you give some advice to this type of writing. Thank you so much!
You wrote over 260 words, while the minimum is 150.
You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.
First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for these errors.
Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. In Task 1, you are likely writing about everything, rather than following the instructions and picking out only the significant points for a good summary. The instructions are:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Writing about everything rather than summarising will cost you points.
Third, you will take a lot of the limited time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.
Fourth, you will not have enough time to devote to Task 2, and get a lower score there. Task 2 counts twice as much for your overall score.
Aim to write 170-190 words for Task 1.
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The two plans illustrate the map (Incorrect. They do not illustrate the map. They show / illustrate / depict the changes made to the layout of the centre.) of a health centre in the year 2005 and also the present day of the same place after the changes are made.
That is very very wordy. Write simply and accurately. Your sentence has 28 words. It is very muddled.
The two plans, one labelled 2005 and the other present day, depict the modifications made to a health centre.
That sentence has 19 words, and complete description. of the infographic.
Overall, the size of the building a long time ago (No, be precise. You have an exact date. "Long time ago" could be a hundred or a thousand years ago.) was smaller than now, this reduced the garden size as an impact for (That makes no sense.) the extended building. (That is not exact or precise. There was one room added on the northwest side and that changed the shape of the building to be a rectangle.
You did not pick out the main features very well. Reducing the garden size is not particularly important.
The new minor operations facility and additional consulting rooms are far more important. The important changes are inside the centre.
Firstly, in 2005, this centre has (Wrong tense. You are describing something in the past.) 12 spaces car parking. on (Every sentence must begin with a capital letter.) entering this centre, on the first left there was a door to the CR3 room and adjacent to this room was an office. Similarly, on the right side, the first door was led to CR1 room and besides this room there was a CR2 room. there were already two rows of chairs along the corridor and at the end of the hallway was the reception desk. Furthermore, on the backside of the reception desk and CR2 room there was a physiotherapy room. Finally, at the backside (Backside means something very different. Moms sometimes punish their child by hitting their backside.) of the building there is a big garden area.
On the other hand, (That is not a good transition phrase. It is for Task 2 when you are writing about opposite opinions. It is not good for Task 1) after renovation, the centre has many new rooms (A parking space is not a room. Rooms are inside. ) like the car parking spaces has been increased to 30. However, (Not a good transition word) the entrance is shifted to the south-west region (wrong word - a region is a large area of a nation or the world.) and after entering the building there is a children's play area on the right side and the reception desk on the left side. Moreover, adjacent to the reception there is an office and next to this is the minor operations room, without any changes to the position of physiotherapy room. Furthermore, the rooms CR1, CR2, CR3 and CR4 are adjacent to each other. Finally, the seating has been arranged on the outside of the rooms in the building
You need to study both maps carefully to describe what changed and what did not change.
These are some of the main features.
- The south entrance was moved to the southwest corner of the building.
- The building was enlarged, by converting the garden on the northwest side to a minor operations room. That made the shape of the building rectangular.
- All the rooms have doors opening to the reception area, which has seating for patients.
- There have been changes made to every room in the facility.
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The two maps, one for 2005 and the other for the present day, depict a health centre, showing the numerous modifications that have been made.
Overall, this facility is one building, surrounded by a parking area and gardens, and designed around a central atrium. After 2005, large sections of the gardens were paved over to make room for more parking, and the building's northwest corner was enclosed to make a new minor operations room. In the interior, there were modifications to every room except the physiotherapy room in the northeast corner.
In detail, the main entrance on the south was moved to the southwest corner, and the car park (parking lot) was enlarged from 12 to 30 spaces. The reception area has a new play area for children, but the basic layout did not change; all the rooms still open onto a central atrium with a seating area. The main office is smaller and there are four consultation rooms along the south and east walls. Before, there were three larger rooms, one in the southwest corner and two along the east wall.
Vocabulary:
Atrium - a large central room in a building.
pave over = to cover with concrete or asphalt so that cars can drive on it.
consultation room (CR) = a room where a patient discusses their medical issues with a nurse or doctor. The Cr typically has a blood pressure machine, scales for weight, and other instruments to assess the patient's vital signs.
Thank you so much!
I have a question. Does it make sense to describe each map in turn?
Body 1 : Descibe everything in 2005
Body 2: Describe everything at present
Also, I thought I only can use " In the south" or "To the south". I saw you use "On the south". All of them are correct, aren't they?
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yugi ohAlso, I thought I only can use " In the south" or "To the south". I saw you use "On the south". All of them are correct, aren't they?
Sorry, it was my mistake. I meant to use south" as an adjective.
In detail, the main entrance on the south side /wall was moved to the southwest corner.
Here are other examples::
You enter the building from the south.
The health centre is (to the) west of the hospital.