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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit.
In order to discuss the above matter, we should first see weather money is everything in life or not? In my opinion, the best things in life do not cost money; therefore, money is not everything even though it is important to live a better life. Businesses should concern about many principles and factors, among them are moral principles and happiness in life, which may be in contrast with making profit.
The most important factor in one’s life is his or her behavior. A business man should care about his customers; for example he should not lie about prices or the quality of what is sold because it is against ethics. Sometimes it brings some loss for a person when he or she wants to behave with morality, yet behavior is more important than some benefit in business. Moreover, people should help each other; they should help people who live in poverty; and these activities need spending money or time which are not in common with making profit for a business man.
We earn money to live better so we should not scarify our life to earn money. People need to be healthy as well as happy in their lives. To be healthy and happy one should exercise, should be in love with someone else, and have entertainment in his or her life. Accordingly, businesses should getaway of their works sometimes. Thinking just about benefits, People find themselves in a situation that they don’t have time to enjoy living and they are working and working.
To sum up, as I think that there are many important matters in our lives which are more valuable than money, businesses should not do anything to make a profit. Being happy and making people happy is in priority to making money.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit.

In order to discuss the above matter, we should first see whether money is everything in life or not. In my opinion, the best things in life do not cost money; therefore, money is not everything, even though it is important for living a better life. Businesses should concern themselves with principles and other factors, among which are moral principles and happiness in life, which may be in conflict with making a profit. The most important factor in one’s life is his or her behavior. A businessman should care about his customers; for example, he should not lie about prices or the quality of what is sold, because that is unethical. It sometimes entails some loss when a person wants to behave morally, yet behavior is more important than some benefit in business. Moreover, people should help each other, they should help people who live in poverty, and these activities require spending money or time which are not in keeping with making a profit for a businessman. We earn money to live better, so we should not ruin our lives to earn money. People need to be healthy as well as happy in their lives. To be healthy and happy one should exercise, should be in love with someone else, and have entertainment in his or her life. Accordingly, businesses should getaway of their works sometimes. Thinking just about benefits, people find themselves in a situation where they don’t have time to enjoy living, and they are working and working. To sum up, as I think that there are many important matters in our lives which are more valuable than money, and businesses should not just do anything to make a profit. Being happy and making people happy take priority over making money.

Rewrite the green parts. "Scarify" is like "scold". Again, I have changed as little as possible.
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I meant "sacrify", it was typing mistake. Is this correct? " we should not sacrify our lives to earn money"
Thanks again for your kindness Enoon.
You meant "sacrifice". I should have seen that. "Sacrifice" works there, better than my "ruin".
One more question,
In this sentence: "which are not in keeping with making a profit"
"in" is not extra?
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No. "To be in keeping with something" is an expression meaning to be consistent with it or conform to the rules of it. "Keeping" is a word in its own right, separately from "keep" ( http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/keeping ).