The table indicates the amount of money Renault, Rover, Vauxhall and Cetirizine spent on press, cinema, outdoor, radio and television advertising in England, Wales, Northern Ireland and Scotland in 2002.

These four British companies seemed to be most interested in television adverts, then their second choice was press rather than radio or outdoor. Some companies even spent no money on cinema advertising.

The data represent that in 2002 all the four companies expended most on television advertising: Cetirizine came first at 70 millions of dollars; Vauxhall, Renault and Rover were at 65, 59 and 45 respectively. Most of the companies also paid attention to press adverts on which Renault and Rover’s expenditure were 45 and 38 millions of dollars each. Vauxhall and Cetirizine were more fond of radio adverts which accounted for 15 millions of dollars of these two companies and the two others.

In 2002, outdoor and cinema advertising seemed to be not very attractive to businesses. The quantity of money the four companies spent on these two types of advertisement was low at about 7 millions of dollars or below. Rover and Cetirizine even did not advertise at the cinema.

The table indicates (wrong word) lists / gives / records / shows the amount of money that certain car manufacturers – Renault, Rover, Vauxhall and Cetirizine spent on five different kinds of advertising (press, cinema, outdoor, radio and television) advertising in England, Wales, Northern Ireland and Scotland in 2002.

These four British (Renault is a French company) companies seemed to be most interested (That is an opinion or conclusion. Do not write opinions in Task 1. Just describe the information or data as if the reader is a professor. Use neutral language.) in television adverts, (comma splice. Run-on sentence.) then their second choice was press rather than radio or outdoor advertising. Some Two companies allocated even spent no money towards / for on cinema advertising.



Renault spent about one third more than any of the others, 132 million dollars. The budget for the other three was 100 million dollars each.



The data represent that in 2002 (You already told the reader the year. Do not repeat it.) All the four companies expended most on television advertising: Cetirizine came first at 70 millions of dollars; (incorrect number expression) Vauxhall, Renault and Rover were at 65, 59 and 45 respectively. Most of the companies also paid attention to press adverts. on which Renault and Rover’s expenditures were 45 and 38 millions of dollars each. Vauxhall and Cetirizine were more fond of (That is an opinion or conclusion) radio adverts which accounted for 15 millions of dollars of these two companies and the two others. (All the companies spent the same amount on radio ads, 15 million dollars.)

In 2002, (You already told the reader the year. Do not repeat it.) outdoor and cinema advertising seemed to be not very attractive (That is an opinion or conclusion.) to businesses. The quantity (wrong word - amount) of money the four companies spent on these two types of advertisement was low at about 7 millions of dollars or less. below. Rover and Cetirizine even did not advertise at the cinema.


The units of measure are millions of dollars.
However, when you write a particular value it must be like this:

1. a (one) million dollars.
2. a half million dollars.
3. 60 million dollars.

Thank you so much for your very detailed correction, AlpheccaStars.

And through this, I understand why my writing was valued 5.5, very poor writing.

-----

You even calculated the numbers which are really interesting.

AlpheccaStars

The table indicates (wrong word) lists / gives / records / shows the amount of money that certain car manufacturers – Renault, Rover, Vauxhall and Cetirizine spent on five different kinds of advertising (press, cinema, outdoor, radio and television) advertising in England, Wales, Northern Ireland and Scotland in 2002.

These four British (Renault is a French company) companies seemed to be most interested (That is an opinion or conclusion. Do not write opinions in Task 1. Just describe the information or data as if the reader is a professor. Use neutral language.) in television adverts, (comma splice. Run-on sentence.) then their second choice was press rather than radio or outdoor advertising. Some Two companies allocated even spent no money towards / for on cinema advertising.


Renault spent about one third more than any of the others, 132 million dollars. The budget for the other three was 100 million dollars each.


The data represent that in 2002 (You already told the reader the year. Do not repeat it.) All the four companies expended most on television advertising: Cetirizine came first at 70 millions of dollars; (incorrect number expression) Vauxhall, Renault and Rover were at 65, 59 and 45 respectively. Most of the companies also paid attention to press adverts. on which Renault and Rover’s expenditures were 45 and 38 millions of dollars each. Vauxhall and Cetirizine were more fond of (That is an opinion or conclusion) radio adverts which accounted for 15 millions of dollars of these two companies and the two others. (All the companies spent the same amount on radio ads, 15 million dollars.)

In 2002, (You already told the reader the year. Do not repeat it.) outdoor and cinema advertising seemed to be not very attractive (That is an opinion or conclusion.) to businesses. The quantity (wrong word - amount) of money the four companies spent on these two types of advertisement was low at about 7 millions of dollars or less. below. Rover and Cetirizine even did not advertise at the cinema.


The units of measure are millions of dollars.
However, when you write a particular value it must be like this:

1. a (one) million dollars.
2. a half million dollars.
3. 60 million dollars.

Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?

I Thank you for your very detailed correction, AlpheccaStars.

And through this, I understand why my writing was valued 5.5, very poor writings.

------

You even calculated the numbers which are really interesting.

AlpheccaStarsRenault spent about one third more than any of the others, 132 million dollars. The budget for the other three was 100 million dollars each.

I must try hard.

I even made silly mistakes which should have never been made.

AlpheccaStars70 millions of dollars; (incorrect number expression)
AlpheccaStarsmore fond of (That is an opinion or conclusion)
AlpheccaStars seemed to be not very attractive (That is an opinion or conclusion.)
AlpheccaStars7 millions of dollars or less. below.

I don't know why I could make up something like this.

AlpheccaStarsVauxhall and Cetirizine were more fond of (That is an opinion or conclusion) radio adverts which accounted for 15 millions of dollars of these two companies and the two others. (All the companies spent the same amount on radio ads, 15 million dollars.)

I know that I must practice more and focus on those common mistakes which are the main reasons to lower my scores.

Have a nice weekend!

Take care.

See you soon.

And I rewrote it.

The table lists the amount of money that certain car manufacturers – Renault, Rover, Vauxhall and Cetirizine – spent on five different kinds of advertising (press, cinema, outdoor and television) in England, Wales, Northern Ireland and Scotland in 2002.


These four companies invested most in television adverts. Then their second choice was press rather than radio or outdoor advertising. Two companies allocated no money for cinema advertising. (Renault spent about one third more than any of the others, 132 million dollars. The budget for the other three was 100 millions each).


All the four companies expended most on television advertising: Cetirizine came first at 70 million dollars; Vauxhall, Renault and Rover were 65, 59 and 45 respectively. Most of the companies also paid attention to press adverts. Renault and Rover’s expenditures were 45 and 38 million dollars each. All the companies spent the same amount on radio ads, 15 million dollars.

The quantity of money the four companies spent on cinema and outdoor advertising was low at 7 million dollars or less. Rover and Cetirizine even did not advertise at the cinema.

Very good. You have 180 words, which is not too little and not too much. You need more variation in the sentence structures. I have some suggestions in the essay. There are some minor errors in grammar.



The table lists the amount of money that certain car manufacturers – Renault, Rover, Vauxhall and Cetirizine – spent on five (you wrote "five" but only listed four. You missed "radio".) different kinds of advertising (press, cinema, outdoor and television) in England, Wales, Northern Ireland and Scotland in 2002.


These four companies invested most in television adverts. Then and their (A compound sentence gives more variety in your writing) second choice was press rather than radio or outdoor advertising. Two companies allocated no money for cinema advertising. (Renault spent about one third more than any of the others, 132 million dollars. The budget for the other three was 100 millions each).


All the four companies expended most on television advertising: Cetirizine came first at 70 million dollars; (Good use of semicolon to join two very closely related ideas) Vauxhall, Renault and Rover were 65, 59 and 45 respectively. Most of the companies also paid attention to press adverts. Renault and Rover’s expenditures were 45 and 38 million dollars each. All the companies spent the same amount on radio ads, 15 million dollars. Notably, (You need to work on transitions between sentences, "notably" for example. Vary the sentences in their structure. It gets a little bit tedious.) very little of their advertising budget was for outdoors, between 2 and 7 million dollars, and even less was allocated for ads in movie theaters. The quantity (wrong word) of money the four companies spent on cinema and outdoor advertising was low at 7 million dollars or less. Rover and Cetirizine even did not advertise there. at the cinema.

Students: We have free audio pronunciation exercises.
AlpheccaStarsVery good. You have 180 words, which is not too little and not too much.

This really motivates me, AlpheccaStars. Thank you. It's you who are always willing to help so that my English is getting better. I do believe that.

AlpheccaStarsThere are some minor errors in grammar.

I wish all my writings would be like this, with some minor errors in grammar.

AlpheccaStarsfive (you wrote "five" but only listed four. You missed "radio".)

I made a silly mistake again. hic

AlpheccaStars. Then and

I will bear in mind this which proves better use of structures and grammar.

AlpheccaStars100 millions

I thought I was allowed to write this way.

100 million dollars is a correct expression.

AlpheccaStarsCetirizine came first at 70 million dollars; (Good use of semicolon to join two very closely related ideas)

Thank you.

AlpheccaStarsNotably, (You need to work on transitions between sentences, "notably" for example. Vary the sentences in their structure. It gets a little bit tedious.)

I do know that I need to make my writings more cohesive, but it's really hard for me to do that because using linking words, coordinators or subordinators is challenging for me. That's the reason why my writings are often boring due to simple sentence overuse. I will try to always think of your recommendation: vary the sentences so that they get less tedious.

Thank you.