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Health issues are closely associated with people’s consumption of fast food so that a higher tax on this kind of food is suggested as a good measure. Personally, I completely disagree with this view.

In my opinion, a higher tax might play no role in improving the situation if people don’t have awareness of protecting their health as well as having knowledge of the consequences of eating too much fast food. Take me as an example, m weight is rising every year as I have a habit of eating after 10 p.m and whenever I feel hungry. Therefore, it is highly important in your endeavor to improve your health by keeping yourself away from unhealthy food.

Another reason for government should not impose a higher tax on junk food is because it would be a financial problem for people who earn less. Sometimes, hamburgers or processed food are familiar to poor workers due to their cheap prices. Junk food helps them not only save time but also have more hours at work as they don’t have much time to prepare a nourishing meal. Thus, instead of raising the tax, the government can reduce the amount of food produced in the sale market every day. Besides, introducing healthy food through social media or by doing propaganda are also good ways to limit fast food consumption.

In conclusion, I disagree with the view that government should impose a higher tax on fast food because I believe that there is more than one way to make the situation better.

I just start writing to prepare for IELTS. Please hekp me to correct this. Is my essay good? Which band score is my essay?

Health issues are closely associated with people’s consumption of fast food so that a higher tax on this kind of food is suggested as a good measure. Personally, I completely disagree with this view.

In my opinion, a higher tax might play no role in improving the situation if people don’t have awareness of protecting their health as well as having knowledge of the consequences of eating too much fast food. Take me as an example, m weight is rising every year as I have a habit of eating after 10 p.m and whenever I feel hungry. Therefore, it is highly important in your endeavor to improve your health by keeping yourself away from unhealthy food.

Another reason for government should not impose a higher tax on junk food is because it would be a financial problem for people who earn less. Sometimes, hamburgers or processed food are familiar to poor workers due to their cheap prices. Junk food helps them not only save time but also have more hours at work as they don’t have much time to prepare a nourishing meal. Thus, instead of raising the tax, the government can reduce the amount of food produced in the sale market every day. Besides, introducing healthy food through social media or by doing propaganda are also good ways to limit fast food consumption.

In conclusion, I disagree with the view that government should impose a higher tax on fast food because I believe that there is more than one way to make the situation better.

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Health issues are closely associated with people’s consumption of fast food so that a higher tax on this kind of food is suggested as a good measure. Personally, I completely disagree with this view because higher taxes will be ineffective in changing people's eating habits..

In my opinion,(Your opinion is in the first paragraph. In the body paragraph, do not write your opinion. The body paragraphs are the arguments supporting it.) First, a higher tax might play no role in improving the situation if people don’t have awareness of protecting their health as well as having knowledge of the consequences of eating too much fast food. Take me as an example, m weight is rising every year as I have a habit of eating fried chicken with fries or a medium pizza after 10 p.m and whenever I feel hungry. (The topic is fast food. You did not mention what you eat after 10 pm..) Therefore, it is highly important in your endeavor to improve your health (But you just wrote that people are unaware of the harmful effects of fast food.) by keeping yourself away from unhealthy food.

Another reason for that the government should not impose a higher tax on junk food is because it would be a financial problem for people who earn less. Sometimes, hamburgers or processed food are familiar to bought by poor workers due to their cheap prices. Junk food helps them not only save time but also have more hours at work as they don’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) have much time to prepare a nourishing meal. Thus, instead of raising the tax, the government can reduce the amount of food produced in the sale market (I do not understand. You want the government to control the amount of food sold? Then some people, mostly the poor people, will go hungry because the markets will not have enough for everyone.) every day. Besides, introducing healthy food through social media or by making public service announcements about nutrition doing propaganda are also good ways to limit fast food consumption.

In conclusion, I disagree with the view that government should impose a higher tax on fast food because I believe that there is more than one way to make the situation better.