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Some people believe that following health advice on the internet is a good thing. however, some others claim that online health advice should not be followed.

Today, the Internet covers most of the world, so people in today's 4.0 society cannot live without the Internet. Many people go up there to read the information to prevent future illness. But some information on social media will not be completely true. But in my opinion, as a person who uses the Internet to look up information, I think when we find reliable websites to read, we will be able to improve our understanding of how to handle pathogens. to partially prevent the spread of the disease to other organs or to other people.

On the one hand, currently, there is a lot of false information on medical websites, most of which is not written by leading medical experts, but is written and posted according to the knowledge and experience of those who have been in the past. going through, those who go through that painful time are the lucky ones and are treated by people with medical expertise, some websites even borrow images of sick people to advertise the treatment. For example, in Vietnam, there are often drug and leaf treatments according to online instructions, but the results when treated in these ways are not effective, and the disease is even worse.

On the other hand, Internet plays an important role in providing information so that people can better understand aspects of the current diseases that they may have. But they need to verify this with doctors, medical centers with expertise, not self-treating at home. However, we can treat at home when we have a mild illness such as cough, fever, runny nose by drinking lemon juice, steaming to warm up the body, taking medicine when prescribed by a doctor. For example, now that the COVID-19 pandemic is happening, we follow the instructions of the websites as well as the doctors such as wearing a mask, disinfecting, avoiding going out many times because we will be infected with COVID otherwise. Fortunately, when we have an understanding of the disease and we have to voluntarily follow it and self-treat at home if possible, the hospital will reduce the number of patients and have room for more critical patients.

Finally, the publication of information on Internet communication should be developed, but it is necessary for network controllers to check the information to avoid public confusion, another thing is that we need to find information on reliable websites.

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Today, the Internet covers most of the world, so people in today's 4.0 society ( I have no idea what a 4.0 society is. ) cannot live without the Internet. Many people go up there (Where is "up there"? ) to read the information to prevent future illness. But some information on social media (You need a transition phrase or word.) . The internet is not the same as social media.) will not be completely true. But in my opinion, as a person who uses the Internet to look up information, I think when we find reliable websites to read, we will be able to improve our understanding of how to handle pathogens. (I do not understand your point here. Health advice might be related to diet, exercise, or specific medical conditions. ) to partially prevent (ungrammatical) the spread of the disease to other organs or to other people.


Your writing does not have a good logical flow of ideas. Your first paragraph rambles without any coherence or cohesion. The first paragraph should not contain a lot of detail. It should only have a sentence or two that convinces the examiner that you understand the topic, and then a thesis statement that is the main point of your essay.

You did not address the topic well in the opening paragraph. It is not about disinfecting (handling pathogens), but researching the internet for advice on what to do to be healthy.

Your essay has 400 words. The minimum is 250. It is too long. Longer essays generally get low scores. Aim for 270-290 words for Task 2.


On the one hand, currently, there is a lot of false information on medical websites, most of which is not written by leading medical experts, but is written and posted according to the knowledge and experience of those who have been in the past. (Something is missing. This means dead people.) going through, (ungrammatical) those who go through that painful time are the lucky ones and are treated by people with medical expertise, (I cannot follow your ideas.) some websites even borrow images of sick people to advertise the treatment. (What treatment are you referring to? A sprained ankle? ) For example, in Vietnam, there are often drug and leaf treatments (Are you referring to homeopathy, or herbal medicines?) according to online instructions, but the results when treated in these ways are not effective, (wrong word) and the disease (What disease do you mean?) is even worse.

On the other hand, the internet plays an important role in providing information so that people can better understand aspects of the current diseases that they may have. But they need to verify this with doctors, medical centers with expertise, (missing conjunction) not self-treating at home. However, we can treat at home when we have a mild illness such as cough, fever, runny nose (missing conjunction) at home by drinking lemon juice, steaming to warm up the body, taking medicine (missing conjunction) when prescribed by a doctor. For example, now that the COVID-19 pandemic is happening, we follow the instructions of the websites as well as the doctors such as wearing a mask, disinfecting, avoiding going out many times (missing conjunction) because we will be infected with COVID otherwise. Fortunately, when we have an understanding of the disease and we have to voluntarily follow it and self-treat at home if possible, the hospital will reduce the number of patients and have room for more critical patients. (That sentence does not make sense. It is not good English.)

Finally, the publication of information on Internet communication (unnatural expression. Do you mean websites?) should be developed, but it is necessary for network controllers (Who are they? There are no censors or controllers for the entire Internet!) to check the information to avoid public confusion, (Comma splice error.) another thing is that we need to find information on reliable websites.