Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people hold the belief that one should make the decision in terms of occupation early and remain in that job permanently. This, they argue, will ensure job seekers better career satisfaction compared to those who change jobs regularly. Although I agree that working as long-term employees can have many substantial benefits, I would oppose the idea that frequent job hoppers could not reach the pinnacle of their careers.
On the one hand, employees who remain loyal and committed to the company they work for over an extended period of time will undoubtedly gain their employers’ trust, thereby increasing their job security and stability. In the midst of the Covid-19 pandemic, for instance, many corporations experienced global financial stress and therefore had to reduce their company size. Short-term employees who had not shown enough commitment were made redundant first, while loyal employees were able to secure their positions. Another merit of staying put at a company is in terms of career progression. The longer you work for a place, the more familiar you get with its culture and your co-workers. This can help you be more effective at dealing with challenging tasks and help you climb higher on your career ladder.
On the other hand, there are several reasons that can help one grow personally and professionally when shifting jobs. A fresh start at a new company means changing the working environment and having a chance to meet new people from different social backgrounds. Adapting to a new organization requires a lot from an individual to work well and establish a strong rapport with other personnel. Thus, this novelty could tremendously do wonders to their personal and professional networks, their ability to be a great team player as well as their interpersonal skills. Moreover, many multinational businesses nowadays are looking for candidates possessing a wide range of experience and skills from various fields. Workers who can meet such requirements are only those who are regularly on the move. Having worked for different organizations, as a result, could give job-hunters a competitive edge on their résumé.
To conclude, while it is true that many workers can benefit greatly from staying in one company, I believe that one who jumps from company to company can also gain considerable advantages and have a satisfying career.
Nam LuongTo what extent do you agree or disagree?
That is the question you have to answer.
Nam Luong I would oppose the idea that frequent job hoppers could not reach the pinnacle of their careers.
That is the answer you gave. our answer does not match the question.
It does not answer "satisfying career life", either.
Everyone reaches the pinnacle "highest point" of their career, so your answer does not make much sense.
Read the task instructions very carefully.
Answer the question!
Nam LuongTo what extent do you agree or disagree?
The examiner is looking for an answer to this question: To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is good to know a good handful of adverbs of extent because this is a very common prompt in IELTS Task 2 essays.
Complete agreement / disagreement:
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completely
fully
totally
wholeheartedly
unreservedly
with no reservations
without reservation
unequivocally
unquestionably
with no hesitation
unconditionally
Partial agreement / disagreement:
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somewhat
partially
partly
to some extent / to a limited extent / to a point
with (some / certain / a few) reservations
conditionally
Many people hold the belief that one should make the decision in terms of occupation early and remain in that job permanently. (You do not understand the difference between occupation and job. An occupation is a doctor, dentist, teacher, lawyer, or engineer. People in these occupations can work in many different jobs and remain in the same occupation.) This, they argue, will ensure job seekers (The topic is not about job seekers) better career satisfaction compared to those who change jobs regularly. Although I agree that working as long-term employees can have many substantial benefits, I totally disagree with would oppose the idea that frequent job hoppers cannot be extremely happy with their career. could not reach the pinnacle of their careers.
The task is not very good. I think that the person who wrote it is not a native English speaker. There are a few unnatural phrases. Also practically nobody works in the same job for their whole career.
Maybe someone who owns their own successful business has the same job (the business owner) for their entire life!
This is probably what they meant to write:
Some people think that people who choose a company to work for job early and keep working there doing it are more likely to get have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change employers jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You wrote over 370 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.
First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.
Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.
Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.
Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.
Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.
Aim to write 270-290 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.
You can use this word counter: https://www.ieltsscore.com/word-counter/
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On the one hand, (That is not a valid transition phrase for an opinion essay.
It is valid for "advantages/ disadvantages" or "discuss both views" types of essays.
You are writing the wrong essay type. In an opinion essay, here is the outline
Paragraph #1: Introduction . State your opinion.
Paragraph #2: Body paragraph #1. Give the first reason for your opinion. Develop this reason with examples and arguments.
Paragraph #3: Body paragraph #2. Give the second reason for your opinion. Develop this reason with examples and arguments. Transition words: Second, in addition, moreover.
Paragraph #4: Conclusion: Restate your opinion.. Summarize the two reasons.
Your first paragraph does not support your opinion. Delete it. If you argue against yourself, you will not please the examiner.
employees who remain loyal and committed to the company they work for over an extended period of time will undoubtedly gain their employers’ trust, thereby increasing their job security and stability. In the midst of the Covid-19 pandemic, for instance, many corporations experienced global financial stress and therefore had to reduce their company size. Short-term employees who had not shown enough commitment were made redundant first, while loyal employees were able to secure their positions. Another merit of staying put at a company is in terms of career progression. The longer you work for a place, the more familiar you get with its culture and your co-workers. This can help you be more effective at dealing with challenging tasks and help you climb higher on your career ladder.
On the other hand,
(First body paragraph) There are several reasons that can help one grow personally and professionally when shifting jobs. A fresh start at a new company means changing the working environment and having a chance to meet new people from different social backgrounds. Adapting to a new organization requires a lot from an individual to work well and establish a strong rapport with other personnel. Thus, this novelty could tremendously do wonders to their personal and professional networks, their ability to be a great team player as well as their interpersonal skills. (Add a specific example from your own experience or knowledge)
(Second body paragraph) Moreover, many multinational businesses nowadays are looking for candidates possessing a wide range of experience and skills from various fields. Workers who can meet such requirements are only those who are regularly on the move. Having worked for different organizations, as a result, could give job-hunters a competitive edge on their résumé.
To conclude, while it is true that many workers can benefit greatly from staying in one company, I believe that one who jumps from company to company can also gain considerable advantages and has the best chance to develop themselves and have a satisfying career.
Learn the five essay types. You have to take a different approach for each one.
