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The bar chart gives information on the reason why Americans travelled, while the pie chart illustrates what travel problems they experienced in 2009

It is clear that the main reason for travel in US was to and from work in 2009. In the same year, price of travel was the most significant issue.

Turning to the details, the proportion of people commuted to and from work was the highest with 49%. Meanwhile, the figure of personal reasons was just 3% higher than shopping at 16%. Social or recreation was second lowest rate which just was one-fifth as high as reason for work. Finally, only 6% of trips were visiting friends and relatives which was the lowest.

According to the pie chart, price travel had the highest data, at 36%. Following that, the rate of safety concerns stood at around a fifth which was almost equal figure of Aggressive drivers, at 17%. The remaining over a quarter is consisted of highway congestion, with 14%, access to public transport, at 8% and space for pedestrians, at 6% which was the least popular problem.

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You need to be very careful in describing figures. You have given the wrong information several times.



The bar chart gives information (imprecise. What kind of information?)on the reason (Is there is only one reason, and the chart gives details about this reason?) why Americans travelled, while the pie chart illustrates what travel problems they experienced in 2009 (missing punctuation)

It is clear that (That is your opinion. Do not write opinions in Task 1.) the main reason for travel in US was to go to and from work in 2009. (This implies the reason will be different in other years.) In the same year, (You already told the reader the time period for the data.) The price of travel was the most significant issue.

Turning to the details, the proportion of people (Missing word) commuted to and from work was the highest with 49%. (That is incorrect. It means that 49% of all the Americans commuted.) Meanwhile, the figure (wrong word. A figure is a diagram inserted into an article.) of personal reasons was just 3% higher than shopping at 16%. Social or recreation was second lowest rate (Wrong word. There are no rates on the chart.) which just was one-fifth as high as reason for work. Finally, only 6% of trips were visiting friends and relatives which was the lowest. (wrong position)

According to the pie chart, price travel (wrong phrasing) had the highest share / proportion / percentage data, at 36%. Following that, the rate of safety concerns stood at around a fifth which was almost equal figure of Aggressive drivers, at 17%. The remaining over a quarter is consisted of highway congestion, with 14%, access to public transport, at 8% and space for pedestrians, at 6% which was the least popular problem. (Popular means that people like it. Do people like problems?)

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