Topic: The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called Salmon.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.


The diagrams illustrate how salmons grow in three different habitats according to three main development stages.

In the first half of life, salmons spend most of their time in river. A mature salmon lays a batch of several eggs in reeds in the upper river, where the current is slow. After nearly five or six months, the eggs hatch into fries, which is a newborn salmon with a 3-8 cm body length. Fries will then swim downstream to the lower river, where there is fast-flowing current and reside here for four years.


After fully growing into their full size of 12-15 cm, fries, which are now called smolts, will once again relocate to a new habitat - the open sea and live here for approximately five years. Once they reach their sexual maturity, adult salmons, which is now 70-76 cm long, will migrate to their birthplace to spawn, reproducing a new salmon generation.


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The diagrams illustrate [ 1] how salmons grow the various stages in the life of a salmon in the three different habitats it lives in. according to three main development stages.

In the first half of life, salmon spend most of their time in [ 2] some river. A mature salmon lays a batch of several [ 3] its eggs in reeds in the upper [ 4] reaches of a river, where the current is slow. After nearly five or six months, the eggs hatch into [ 5] fry fries, which is the term used for newborn salmon. The fry, with a 3-8 cm body length, Fries will then swim downstream to the lower parts of the river, where there is fast-flowing current and reside there for four years.

After fully feeding in the river, they grow ing into their full in size of to about 12-15 cm, fries, which and are now then called smolts. They are then ready for the next stage and will once again relocate to a new habitat - the open sea and live there for approximately five years, feeding and growing all the while. Once they reach their sexual maturity, adult salmon, which is are by then now 70-76 cm long, will migrate back to their birthplace to spawn, reproducing a new salmon generation of salmon.

[ 1]: Fish names are usually not countable.

[ 2]: “river” is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. You can also use “a river” there.

[ 3]: “Several” is not used for large amounts of something.

[ 4]: If you don’t know the noun “reach”, you can use “part”.

[ 5]: “fries” means potato chips. “Fry” meaning baby fish is a mass noun.