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The living expense has an inclination to climb up higher than before within many countries. This essay will clarify to the extend that it has affected individuals and society, also, I will provide the solutions to this problem.

First of all, the living expense is increasing which means that there are changes in the price of products people purchase for daily usage. However, it does not mean that the tax levied on its product can be reduced. Therefore, it has a paramount issue on city dwellers, especially, for those who are with the burden. The worker, for example, will endure unequitable situation that they have to do the same workload capacity as before but do not satisfy with the wages to earn for their living. They might face mental health problems such as stress or depression. In addition, this will lead to the reduction of employee retention, so far will afflict to the company’s productivity and profit. Moreover, it will directly affect to the whole society. It will create the imbalanced society such as raising the high inflation and reducing the development of conurbation of the country.

The right solutions for this problem will first need the intervention of the government. The government is people who is responsible for the actions to consider the high cost of livings. They can change the policy or give subsidies or reduce the tariff amount to help the country rebalanced, for example. Besides, they can stimulate the company to give rewards to employees such as incentives, bonuses for those who did great in their job.

In conclusion, high living expense causes health problem in employees, therefore, leading to low retention, so far it will affect the whole of society. The solutions for this problem will need the approval of changes from the government significantly.

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The living expense (unnatural expression) has an inclination (wrong word) to climb up (wrong word) higher than before within many countries.

You need to use the word "inflation." That is the correct vocabulary word for this topic. Do not mention "essay." The examiner knows you are writing an essay, and they know the topic. Do not tell them what they know already. Write a short introduction to your main points. You also need to give examples from your personal experience. Are there increasing prices in your country or city?

High inflation leads to health problems among the workers, and results in unemployment. The government can assist in easing the impacts of higher prices.

This essay will clarify to the extend that it has affected individuals and society, also, I will provide the solutions to this problem.

First of all, the living expense is increasing which means that there are changes in the prices of products people purchase for daily usage. However, it does not mean that the tax levied on its product (I do not understand this point. The sales tax or value added tax is a fixed rate. It has nothing to do with this topic.) can be reduced. Therefore, it has a paramount issue (wrong word. You can write "it has an adverse effect" OR " it has become a serious issue". Your collocations are mixed up.) on city dwellers, especially, for those who are with the burden. ( do not understand what you mean. Everyone has to pay for food, housing and services.) The worker, for example, will endure unequitable situation (That is not good English. You need to study collocations and expressions.) that they have to do the same workload capacity (wrong expression - capacity does not fit here. ) as before but do not satisfy with the wages (poor English. Bad collocations) to earn for their living. They might face mental health problems such as stress or depression. In addition, this will lead to the reduction of employee retention, so far will afflict (wrong word) to the company’s productivity and profit. Moreover, it will directly affect to (wrong word) the whole society. It will create the imbalanced society such as raising the high inflation (wrong expression) and reducing the development of conurbation (wrong word - it makes no sense.) of the country.

The right solutions for this problem will first need the intervention of the government. The government is (wrong verb) people who is (wrong form) responsible for the actions to consider the high cost of livings. (wrong form) They can change the policy or give subsidies or reduce the sales tax rate tariff amount to help the country rebalanced, (wrong word) for example. Besides, they can stimulate (wrong word) the company (One company. Which one do you mean?) to give rewards to employees such as incentives, bonuses for those who did great in their job.

In conclusion, high living expense causes health problem (wrong word) in employees, therefore, leading to low retention, so far it will affect the whole of society. The solutions for this problem will need the approval of changes from the government significantly. (wrong word)

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