Topic 2: Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

My essay:

People have differing views about the grant to develop the ability of creative artists. While it is often stated that funding from other sources, I would argue that creative artists can have more financial support from governments.

Alternative sources are not stable and sometimes, they don't have enough to fund for a long time, so it wastes of creative artists' time and abilities. In fact, varieties of alternative sources are public on the Internet. Nowadays, many television shows organize a great deal of competitions to search for candidates. Winners will have awards to help them develop their career. Unfortunately, after competitions, most winners have short reputation and awards are not enough to improve their ability for a long time. In Vietnam, many candidates who take part in a lot of famous television programs still have many difficulties to make their dream come true.

There are many reasons that lead me to believe that governments should have more grants for creative artists. Firstly, works of art contribute a great deal of country development. Many famous compositions attract a lot of interest from tourists. For example, in Da Nang city, the local government had grants to find talented architects who could have great designs to city architecture. Administration of Da Nang city is one of the best evidence which becomes a great place not only to work but also to check-in in the entrance. Secondly, it is widely known that creative artists feel encouraged to dedicate their abilities and talents for their country by governments financial support. They can stimulate the creative artist's creativity and imagination. Many talented students are willing to come back to their city because they have many interesting grants and opportunities to support their merit. If people have a lack of financial support from their country, they would be worry to develop and dedicate their abilities.

In conclusion, both alternative sources and governments financial support are important, but I believe that grants from governments are longer, more stable and can affect strongly to creative artists.

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Topic 2: Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

My essay:

People have differing views about the grant to develop the ability of creative artists. While it is often stated that funding from other sources, I would argue that creative artists can have more financial support from governments.

Alternative sources are not stable and sometimes, they don't have enough to fund for a long time, so it wastes of creative artists' time and abilities. In fact, varieties of alternative sources are public on the Internet. Nowadays, many television shows organize a great deal of competitions to search for candidates. Winners will have awards to help them develop their career. Unfortunately, after competitions, most winners have short reputation and awards are not enough to improve their ability for a long time. In Vietnam, many candidates who take part in a lot of famous television programs still have many difficulties to make their dreams come true.

In contrast, sometimes, creative artists should not have government funds. First, creative artists can be depended on this and lose their real goals. In some case, some artists will be lazy and have a life which live by grants from governments. Second, it will be unfair and it will cause much controversy because some creative artists will dedicate and inspirate rather than other. It will be counterproductive. Creative artists can inspirate and make many bad compositions because they have too much pressure from having government funds.

On the other hand, there are many reasons that lead me to believe that governments should have more grants for creative artists. Firstly, works of art contribute a great deal of country development. Many famous compositions attract a lot of interest from tourists. For example, in Da Nang city, the local government had grants to find talented architects who could have great designs to city architecture. Administration of Da Nang city is one of the best evidence which becomes a great place not only to work but also to check-in in the entrance. Secondly, it is widely known that creative artists feel encouraged to dedicate their abilities and talents for their country by governments financial support. They can stimulate the creative artist's creativity and imagination. Many talented students who study aboard are willing to come back to their city because they have many interesting grants and opportunities to support their merit. If people have a lack of financial support from their country, they would be worry to develop and dedicate their abilities.

In conclusion, both alternative sources and governments financial support are important, but I believe that grants from governments are longer, more stable and can affect strongly to creative artists.

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People have differing views about the grant to develop the ability of how creative artists should be financially supported. While it is often stated that their funding should come from other various private sources, I would argue that creative artists can have more should get most of their financial support from governments.

Unlike public funding, alternative sources are not always stable and sometimes, they don't do not have enough to fund last for a long time, so it that wastes of creative artists' time and abilities. In fact, varieties of alternative sources are public on the Internet. Nowadays, many television shows stations organize a great deal of competitions to search for talented artists, and candidates. winners will have awards to help them develop their career. Unfortunately, after such competitions, most winners have short-lived fame reputation and the awards they receive are not enough to improve their ability cover their finances for a long time. In Vietnam, many candidates who take part in a lot of famous television programs still have many difficulties to make their dreams come true.

In contrast, sometimes, creative artists should not have government funds. First, creative artists can become depended dependent on this financial aid and lose track of their real goals. In some cases, some artists will become lazy and have a life which live by totally rely on the grants from governments. Second, it will be unfair and it will cause much controversy because some creative artists will dedicate and inspirate rather than other. It will be counterproductive. Creative artists can inspirate and make many bad compositions because they have too much pressure from having government funds.

On the other hand, Nevertheless, there are many reasons that lead me personally to believe that governments should have allocate more grants for creative artists. Firstly, works of art contribute a great deal of to a country’s development. Many famous compositions attract a lot of interest from tourists. For example, in Da Nang city, the local government had allocated grants to find talented architects who could have contribute great designs to the city’s architecture. Administration of That initiative by Da Nang city is one of the best evidence which becomes a great place not only to work but also to check-in in the entrance. Secondly, it is widely known that stable financial support from the government greatly encourages creative artists feel encouraged to dedicate their abilities and talents for to their country. by governments financial support. They can stimulate the creative artist's creativity and imagination. In fact, governments in many developing countries talented students who study aboard are willing can entice artists to come back to their city because they have many homeland by offering them interesting grants and opportunities to support their work. merit. If people have a lack of financial support from their country, they would be worry to develop and reluctant to dedicate themselves to their society. their abilities.

In conclusion, both alternative sources and government financial support are important, but I believe that grants from governments are longer-term, more stable and can affect strongly to better support creative artists.

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I think the underlined parts are not necessary, because I tried to write them and did not have clear ideas. I tried to write too much many things which are not good useful and which do not show express my thinking.

I will try to write everything more obvious and just write clear my ideas more clearly.

Thanks for your advices advice.

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