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i see the pain in your sad eyes,
your sorrow falls like rain
brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you back in a place in your dreams.

out of this vain hope i want to hold you
but i'm afraid you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place, and stay here at all cost.
i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the only way to keep you truely safe.
even if my heart and soul is lost.
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I don't find much poetry here, sorry. If you will write it out as prose sentences, I will correct it for you.
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how about this sir?

i see the pain in your sad eyes,
your sorrow falls like rain
it brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you in a place in your dreams.

in vain hope i want to hold you
but only because i fear
you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place.

i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the only way to keep you truely safe.
i will save you at all cost
even if my soul and heart is lost.
No improvement.