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Please help me review IELTS essay task 2.

Topic: The impact that the growing demand for more flights has had on the environments is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people travelling by air is to increase tax on flights. To what extend do you think this could solve the problem?


Increasing carbon pollution from growing aviation becomes a critical concern for many authorities. People believe that increasing tax on flights to reduce airline passengers is one of actions nations should take to protect communities from dangerous impacts of climate change. I agree somewhat with this idea.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why governments should raise the flight taxes to limit airline travel. First, since unregulated pollution from aviation is the fastest-growing source of the greenhouse gas emissions which drives global climate change, limiting air travel is required. In fact, flights are using fossil fuel for energy, it could produce a large quantities of carbon emissions which heat to the atmosphere and lead to climate change. Since cheaper airfares encourage people to fly rather than taking less environmental damage like train or bus, higher tax for airline passengers might lead to higher airline ticket prices, which could consequently reduce unnecessary flights. Second, since fossil fuel seems not environmentally friendly, governments can use the increase to finance the long-term projects that could help to develop potential alternative fuels.

On the other hand, I believe that countries should take other solutions into consideration rather than raising tax. First, reducing carbon emissions need to be balanced with allowing people the opportunities to fly, especially for low income people. In fact, majority of airline passengers have high income hence the higher airline ticket price is also adaptable for them while it seems not fair with low income passengers who travel by air in emergency situations. Second, scientists argue some new fuels that burn more cleanly and completely, resulting in less pollution. This means that nations should pay more attention on deeper investment in sustainable fuels and enable them to advance in aviation industry to replace fossil fuel, which can help to reduce detrimental impacts on the environment.

In conclusion, besides increasing tax on flights to limit the number of people travelling by air, countries should also consider replacing fossil fuel with more environmentally friendly energy to reduce carbon pollution.

The impact that the growing demand for more flights has had on the environments environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people travelling by air is to increase tax on flights. To what extend do you think this could solve the problem?

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Increasing carbon pollution from growing aviation becomes [ 1] has become a critical concern for many authorities. People believe that increasing levying higher taxes on flights to reduce airline passengers is one of actions approach nations should take to protect communities the global environment, especially from the dangerous impacts of climate change. I agree somewhat with this idea.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why governments should raise the flight taxes on flights to limit airline travel. First, since unregulated pollution from aviation is the fastest-growing source of the greenhouse gas emissions which drives global climate change, limiting air travel is required. In fact, flights are using fossil fuel for energy, it could and that produces a large quantities volume of carbon emissions which heat to the atmosphere and lead to climate change. Since cheaper airfares encourage people to fly rather than taking less environmentally damaging transport like [ 2] trains or buses, a higher tax for airline passengers might lead to higher airline would increase ticket prices, which could consequently reduce unnecessary flights. Second, since fossil fuel seems not environmentally friendly, governments can use the increase revenue from such taxes to finance the long-term research projects that could help to into developing potential alternative fuels.

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[ 1]: Note the present perfect tense. The present simple was wrong in that sentence.

[ 2]: When we talk about something in general, we use the plural (if it’s countable).

Your second body paragraph is at best repetitive; in fact, most of it is off topic. Examiners can easily spot that and will give you a low mark. You can, for example, write a paragraph about the drawbacks of increased air ticket prices. Post your revised essay below, if you wish.

Hi Teacher,

Thanks so much. I am posting my corrected essay based on your feedback, pls help to correct it one more time.

BRs,

An

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Increasing pollution from growing aviation has become a critical concern for many authorities. People believe that levying higher taxes on flights is one of approach to protect the global environment, especially from the dangerous impacts of climate change. I agree somewhat with this idea.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why governments should raise the taxes on flights to limit airline travel. First, since pollution from aviation is the fastest-growing source of the greenhouse gas emissions which drives global climate change, limiting air travel is required. In fact, flights are using fossil fuel for energy, and that produces a large volume of carbon emissions which heat the atmosphere and lead to climate change. Since low-cost airlines encourage people to fly rather than taking less environmentally damaging transports like trains or buses, a higher tax for airline passengers would increase airline ticket prices, which could consequently reduce unnecessary flights. Second, since fossil fuel seems not environmentally friendly, governments can use the revenue from such taxes to finance research into developing potential alternative fuels like bio-fuels or planting more trees, which might help our environment cleaner and greener in long term.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages need to be taken into consideration before raising the taxes on flights. First, since limiting airline transports by increasing taxed might reduce opportunities to fly of low income passengers, it seems not pair on them. In fact, the low-cost airlines and subsequent abundance of lower fares allowed many people to travel for the first time and others more regularly, a higher airfare only allows poor people to travel in emergency situations. Second, any efforts to limit air transports such as increasing taxes might cause negative effects on the growth of tourism industry which often makes up a high single-digit or even two-digit percentage of nation GDP. This means that numerous people working in tourism-related sections would face unemployment if authorities try increase taxes.

In conclusion, I believe that rapid growth of aviation industry has resulted in pollution and protecting our environment is necessary, but I partly agree with the idea that governments should levying higher taxes on flights.

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Increasing pollution from growing aviation has become a critical concern for many authorities. People believe that levying higher taxes on flights is one of approach to protect the global environment, especially from the dangerous impacts of climate change. I agree somewhat with this idea.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why governments should raise the taxes on flights to limit airline travel. First, since pollution from aviation is the fastest-growing source of the greenhouse gas emissions, which drives global climate change, limiting air travel is required. In fact, flights are using fossil fuel for energy, and that produces a large volume of carbon emissions which heat the atmosphere and lead to climate change. Since low-cost airlines encourage people to fly rather than taking less environmentally damaging transports like trains or buses, a higher tax for airline passengers would increase airline ticket prices, which could consequently reduce unnecessary flights. Second, since fossil fuel seems not environmentally friendly, governments can use the revenue from such taxes to finance research into developing potential alternative fuels like bio-fuels or planting more trees, which might help our environment become cleaner and greener in the long term.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages that need to be taken into consideration before raising the taxes on flights. First, since limiting airline travel transports [ 1] by increasing taxed taxes might reduce the opportunities to fly of for low-income passengers, it seems not pair fair on them. In fact, the low-cost airlines and subsequent abundance of lower fares have allowed many people to travel for the first time and others more regularly. Thus, [ 2] higher airfares only allows would be impact poor people. to travel in emergency situations. Second, any efforts to limit air travel transports [ 1] such as by increasing taxes might cause negative will likely have devastating effects on revenue from the growth of tourism industry which often makes up a high single-digit or even two-digit significant percentage of a nation’s GDP. This means that numerous people working in tourism-related sections sectors would face unemployment if authorities try increase impose such taxes.

In conclusion, I believe that rapid growth of aviation industry has resulted in pollution and protecting our environment is necessary, but I partly agree with the idea that governments should levying higher taxes on flights. [ 3]

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[ 1]: Note that “transport” as a noun is uncountable.

[ 2]: When we speak about something in general, we use the plural (if it’s countable).

[ 3]: That’s not what goes in a conclusion. Instead, you should summarize the main findings from the body paragraphs in one or two sentences.

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Fix it one more time, and post below.

Hi Teacher,

Below is my corrected essay, pls help to review it one more time. Thank you so much.

BRs,

An

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Increasing pollution from growing aviation has become a critical concern for many authorities. People believe that levying higher taxes on flights is one of approach to protect the global environment, especially from the dangerous impacts of climate change. I agree somewhat with this idea.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why governments should raise the taxes on flights to limit airline travel. First, since pollution from aviation is the fastest-growing source of the greenhouse gas emissions which drives global climate change, limiting air travel is required. In fact, flights are using fossil fuel for energy, and that produces a large volume of carbon emissions which heat the atmosphere and lead to climate change. Since low-cost airlines encourage people to fly rather than taking less environmentally damaging transports like trains or buses, a higher tax for airline passengers would increase airline ticket prices, which could consequently reduce unnecessary flights. Second, since fossil fuel seems not environmentally friendly, governments can use the revenue from such taxes to finance research into developing potential alternative fuels like bio-fuels or planting more trees, which might help our environment become cleaner and greener in the long term.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages that need to be taken into consideration before raising the taxes on flights. First, since limiting airline travel by increasing taxes might reduce the opportunities to fly of low-income passengers, it seems not fair on them. In fact, the low-cost airlines and lower fares have allowed many people to travel for the first time and others more regularly. Thus, higher airfare would impact poor people. Second, any efforts to limit air travel such as increasing taxes will likely have devastating effects on revenue from the tourism industry which often makes up significant percentage of nation GDP. This means that numerous people working in tourism-related sectors would face unemployment if authorities impose such taxes.

In conclusion, I believe that levying higher taxes on flights to reduce global climate change impacts is necessary, but governments should also consider social and economic problems before doing so.

For the third, and final, time: "transport" as a noun is not countable. If you want me to spend my time checking your essay, the least you could do is pay attention to my corrections. Go through your essay again and make sure you've made the required changes.

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