Hello everybody, could you proofread my letter of application please?

I have to apply for a job as travel coordinator.

Here are the skills company’s looking for: Experience, to be IT literate, good communication skills, be self-motivated, work to deadlines.

To whom it may concern

With reference to your advertisement inserted in the “xxxxxxx” of November 5th,

I should like to apply for the position of Business travel coordinator.

As you will see from my enclosed Curriculum Vitae et studiorum, I graduated from the University of xxxxx in 2000 with a degree in Tourism Studies. During my following apprenticeship, I obtained practical training in all aspects which tourism is involved in. I have been working as a European Tour Guide since 1998 for the xxxxx , which is based in . Prior to this, I worked as a travel agent as freelance during the summer season. I hold certificates in computer graphics and word-processing. Furthermore, I speak fluent French, Italian and Chinese.

I have smart appearance, I am friendly, organised and patient and I am used to working under pressure and to a deadline.

As my references show, I have been very popular with many of the clients who specifically asked for me to be their travel coordinator on tours they went on.

I believe the post you offer will give me the chance to strengthen and deepen my stock of knowledge.

I will be glad to supply you with any further information you may need and to attend an interview at any time convenient to you.

Yours faithfully

XXXXXXXXX
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Can anybody help me please??
Hi,

I think it's well written.
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Thanks a lor anonymous.

I hope someone else could give me advice
Hi,

Yes, you do write very well.

I've suggested some changes.

Clive

To whom it may concern<<< Never start with this. Say 'Dear Sir or Madam,' if you don't know the person's name.

With reference to your advertisement inserted in the “***” of November 5th, I should like to apply for the position of Business Travel Coordinator.

As you will see from my enclosed CV, I graduated from the University of *** in 2000 with a degree in Tourism Studies. I also have practical training in all aspects of tourism. I have been working as a European Tour Guide since 1998 for *** Tours, which is based in Spain. Prior to this, I worked as a freelance travel agent. I hold certificates in computer graphics and word-processing. Furthermore, I speak fluent French, Italian and Chinese.

I have a smart appearance, I am friendly, organised and patient and I am used to working under pressure and to a deadline.

As my references show, I have been very popular with many of the clients who specifically asked for me to be their travel coordinator on tours they went on.

I believe the post you offer will give me the chance to strengthen and deepen my stock of knowledge, and that in return I will be an asset to your business.

I will be glad to supply you with any further information you may need and to attend an interview at any time convenient to you.

Yours sincerely,
Thank you very very much Clive for your advice.

Toshio

P.S. How can I solve this problem about loggin in here?

Thank you again!
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What problem?

Clive
Sometimes I can't login with my user and password.

I hope it's a temporary problem, perhaps related only to my account.

I find this forum very useful, so I hope I'll have again your advice in future for other questions:)
Hi,

It's just a temporary problem arising from our move to a new server.

Clive
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