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I have a trouble with the usage of pronouns when I tell someone something I've heard from someone else.
For instance,

"Sara said, a tall blond girl punched a short brunette girl because the short brunette girl was kissing the tall blond girl's boyfriend. Then a tall brunette girl who was a friend of the short brunette girl punched back the tall blond girl in the tall blond girl's face."

I am not sure whether the sentence above itself is OK or not. But if it's worth while, I want to know on which words I can replace with pronouns like 'she' or 'her'.

Thanks in advance.
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Your original sentences are far too awkward, Infinity, but with all those women thrashing about, pronouns would only confuse the issue even more; you do need other shortening devices, like:

'Sara said that a tall blonde girl punched a short brunette because the latter was kissing the former's boyfriend. Then a tall brunette girl, the short brunette's friend, punched the tall blonde back in the face.'

(PS: Strictly, girls are 'blonde' or 'brunette', while boys are 'blond' or 'brunet', but these distinctions have become fuzzy in English.)
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Thanks, MM.