A dog had been with Larry since it was pup. The dog was old, cripple and blind. Larry was always with it. Although it was stinky, Larry did not smell it. Larry's roommate John wanted to get rid the dog because the smell always bothered him. Even though the dog left the room, the smell still would hang there for a while. One day, they sat opposite each other at the table. They were playing cards. John said that his friend's dog herded a lot of pups. He wanted to get some of them. Larry paid no attention about what he said.

A bunk house stood somewhere in the plain. There was about eight beds in it. All labor men who worked in the barley farm lived there. The boss's daughter-in-law lived a miled away. People in the bunk house talked about her. She was a tramp who gave the eye to every one she saw.

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Ever since its birth, this dog has been with Larry. Now, the dog was malodorous, old, crippled and blind, but Larry was always with it. (The adj. stinky is too colloquial to be employed in written English.) Larry's roommate, John, wanted to get rid of the dog because he was bothered by the smell. Even though the dog left the room, the smell would still remain in the room. One day, they sat opposite each other at the table, playing cards. John said that his friend's dog herded a lot of pups and that he wanted to get some of them; but Larry paid no attention about what he said.

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Couple of things:
- You need to connect your sentences. A good solid sentence will always remind the reader of something and introduce the reader TO something. Connect your sentences with commas, semicolons, hyphens, etc... Use adverbs too, like but, also, because, etc...
- Use spell check; it will pick up or flag spelling and grammatical errors.

Now, try to edit your second paragraph. If you still think you need help, write back!

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A bunk house stood somewhere in the plain. There was about eight beds in it. All labor men who worked in the barley farm lived there. The boss's daughter-in-law lived a miled away. People in the bunk house talked about her. She was a tramp who gave the eye to every one she saw.
Thank you Castellano,

A bunk house which had eight beds stood somewhere in the plain. All labor men who worked in the farm lived there and the boss' daughter-in-law lived a miled away. People in the bunk house talked about her because she was a tramp who gave the eye to every one she saw